glitterunicorn, The Reader

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How to make choices matter? on 4/13/2024 6:35:43 PM

Wow thank you sooo much for this breakdown, Mystic.  

How to make choices matter? on 4/13/2024 5:24:20 PM

I'm trying to add good amount of choices to my new story, and I would appreciate advice on how to make choices with significance so the reader could actually direct the story.

Feedback on 4/29/2023 11:30:50 AM


I will most likely do that. Variables are far more complicated than I thought. Thank you, Mizal.

Feedback on 4/29/2023 11:05:39 AM

Thank you; I really appreciate this. The start has been really slow with no definite plot, so I plan on introducing a motive and conflict into what I have already. As far as the choices go, I'll try to make them have a greater impact and let the reader make more in-depth choices, personality-wise, so it actually matters. The current segment is really just an introduction to the stats, which influence how others will react to the reader or how the reader will speak to others (e.g., kindness is low; Mr. Serrano doesn't give you a ride).

Like I said, thank you for your feedback, and I'll be sure to update the game.

Feedback on 4/29/2023 10:48:02 AM

I needed a break because I was literally working on it every day, and it stopped being enjoyable. However, I'll definitely resume working on it and use all the advice I've been given.


Feedback on 4/29/2023 1:22:30 AM

Feedback on 4/29/2023 1:17:20 AM

Don't be mistaken yourself, seeing you come back here to make a pointless argument is also quite entertaining for me as well.

Feedback on 4/29/2023 1:12:59 AM

I know I'm not hard of seeing, but I am having trouble finding the feedback. 

Besides, haven't you heard of the phrase, "It takes one to know one"?

Feedback on 4/29/2023 1:01:57 AM

No, but I'm failing to realize why you're still replying if you're not going to use the thread for what it's intended for. Are you unable to comprehend, too? :(( 

If you couldn't understand the title, this thread was meant for feedback for my story. Perhaps next time, click out of the thread if you mistake me for a black person...

Feedback on 4/29/2023 12:49:38 AM

No shit, Sherlock. Way to point out the obvious. Have your parents ever called you special growing up?