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Hey, everyone. Not much of an intro, as seeing that I'm busy....but here is where I post my progress on my storygames, and right now, my top priority is Andrew Peterson: The Twin Towers. 

In short, this thread serves as a temporary motivational thread for me to get things done and get feedback from users. You can come from anywhere in the corners of CYS and have some ounce of participation, I don't care, unless you give good advice and help me work....

Credit to BradinDvorak for helping me script out the fancy interactive book cover :)

Progress on Andrew Peterson: 0.001/100?

Motivation: temporarily 0

Is it about 9/11? If not, I'd recommend NOT CALLING IT "The Twin Towers". 

Titles I can imagine to replace it:

Andrew Peterson: Destruction?
Andrew Peterson: Ruins?
Andrew Peterson?

Any suggestions or final ideas, Malk? I'm trying to think right now, but it's late. I'm tired.

Ruins sounds better if it's between those three.

All right, Ruins it is, unless anyone else has any other title to suggest.....

Oh. Didn't know I could recommend other words. Alright, I prefer "Desolation" then.

It's not as commonly used and not to sound like a hipster, but less commonplace words have the use of not being glossed over as easily. (Likewise, overly common words can grate on people or lose their importance. Like how people claiming every damn thing is terrorism will make the word seem funny or will get an eye roll instead of actually inciting terror.) 

Like the detailed definition, Mr. Farren, I agree. Desolation reminds me of "The Desolation of Smaug." Is it just me, or does "desolation" sound like a simple movie title...?

Back on track....I have school until Friday and today's Wednesday....and when I get home I have around two hours to work on it. Does that sound like an "ok" schedule to write in?

It does, doesn't it? It's a word that has that old time-y feel to it, which I love, honestly.

*shrug* Your schedule is your schedule. Unless you have a deadline, you simply need to pick one that works for you. The only recommendation I'd offer is that you make writing a regular thing so you don't get out of habit and your previous work doesn't start feeling strange or distant to you.

I'd like school to be on a different dismissal schedule, but, unfortunately, it cannot change just by my request. Although, I can work extra on weekends. I'd like to finish this near December, before my glorious birthday :) And the ratings are my birthday presents! :)

But enough of that...

Desolation sounds like a lonely word. Maybe one extra word to make it sound more detailed?

It'd help to know more about the story. Granted, if you just want me to throw out a word that feels like it fits... humanity tends to find a great deal of clarity either in or after tragedy, which is what Desolation implies. Perhaps a word invoking the feeling of an epiphany?

Well, to give a small bit, the story is about an eleven-year-old named Andrew Peterson (obviously will be a sequel) living in New York when the two planes barrel into the Twin Towers. His father had worked there and Andrew had decided to visit him in the hours he had after school. Then the planes crashed, killed his father, and left Andrew to die. Andrew was rescued by the brave people who had marched into the Towers to save the survivors. 

--SPOILERS--

Then I think my idea is appropriate--or, at least, on the right track.

So just Desolate, then? *pulls out notepad*

Ah, well, I was going to say that if you wanted to add another word in addition to Desolation (or a form thereof), then a few nice companion words would be ...

"Manifests", "Realized," "Vision," "Revelation," "Emergence" and "Horizon"
 

Desolation Manifest.....yes....*evil laugh*

Anyway, that's what I'm picking. Any opposed please stand.