Thanks Alienrun for your constructive criticism, I changed some things you noted (the battery can't be fully charged) and will publish it soon. The prose is still flowery, but hey, so am I :D - I hope you'll give it another chance.
As I mentioned in another post here, 'It's more of a game then a multi-path story. There are sidetracks and dead ends and currently I've found only found one way to score 100 and find the treasure too. I have enjoyed playing it and I hope others agree and accept the challenge.'