12/10/2023

4/3/2025 11:18 AM

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Sage

Chillin' in the Park

unpublished

You are chillin' in the park. (Unpublished for good, although I would like to say to TCat I thought I did correct the grammatical errors in the story, and would like to know where I didn't correct them. A sequel will be released shortly, and hopefully an improvement on this story.) Edit: nevermind, fuck that. Nothing like this will ever be attempted by me again. This story will not be deleted just so I know exactly what not to write.

Sydney

unpublished

I really, really hate spoilers.

Ye-HAW

unpublished

Gather up your guns, it's a redneck adventure.

Looks pretty acceptable, you may proceed. You might like Mizal and all of her stories.

Story B

My vote is for B, A seemed to drag out a little too long to hold my attention. They were both good though.

Don't make me renew the order, just chill out. I know your mad and everything, but I would like to remind you that you're the crazy person who went out and did that. Also, spoofing? Seriously?

Well it would probably depend on their own personal tastes. Like diabetics would taste sweet, smokers would have a smoky tobacco flavor, health nuts would taste like water, alcoholics would taste spicy. Edibles taste just earthy so weed smokers would just taste like salad. But I'm not sure, I don't drink blood. That would be a cool thing to add though, where the kidnapper makes him eat or do different things based on what she wants her next meal to taste like.

I would assume, I think I've seen references in the skooma den (skyrim) and other works. I'll make sure to include that in my story though.

To clarify, the main character is kidnapped by a vampire to become essentially a blood cow. Your goal is to escape, but you developed an intense attachment to her from a combination of Stockholm syndrome, the vampire's natural seduction (which is a thing in most vampires from fiction, such as skyrim), and addiction from the endorphins injected during the vampire bite. Every time you make a decision that goes against the vampire's wishes, you have to play a minigame to fight against your own head. TL;DR, there's a perfectly not faggot reason for me to write about a vampire in such a fashion.

Thanks, I don't know why I didn't do that.

No, it'll be worse if I am. I have to write as if the character is just captivated by this vampire to advance the plot the way I want and it be realistic. If you want Besumt I got you though.

This is my description of this vampire character in my story. You feel a sharp pain as her sharp teeth sink into your neck, and you feel your blood heat up to an unbearable temperature, boiling in every vein and artery in your body, feeling like lava underneath your skin. You feel her teeth slide out of your neck, and promptly fall to your knees. You look up at your assailant, who seems impossibly tall standing over you. She has a lithe figure, with long legs covered in a long velvet black skirt leading up to a black cotton bodice with a low neckline. The dress barely holds on to her shoulders, held together with loose corset lacing running up to her ivory neck, which is covered in blood that drips from her smiling lips. Her teeth and fangs are already completely white and pearlescent, glittering in the dim candlelight as they begin to move.