Better Decision-Making

Well... I think the chapters are long enough, and the consequences feel right given the actions taken by the player. I played through the game twice taking different paths, and it ends somewhat abruptly. If the game is about better decision-making, it would be nice to have some rating in the end, rating the decisions you made and maybe explaning which were bad and which were good and why. But that's probably part of the lesson this storygame belongs to, not part of the game itself.

Good and quick

Reading this game was not a good decision

Very good & basic. Gets boring after a while though. Very quick. Will be recommending this to others.

Man. Jimmy messed me up. I need to learn how to fight. Next time, he's going down.

Yeah, take that, Jimmy!

thanks

Pretty straight-forward and casual, not really much to this. This reads a bit like a text for students learning English, if so there are a lot of colloquialisms, but if it's for people to work on their decision-making it's also a bit overly simplistic (perhaps it's a student project?). While it's nice that this site can be used as an educational tool the quality of stories and comments that comes out of this are not usually intimidatingly impressive and most resulting stories wind up unpublished, I recommend making this preview-only rather than publishing the story unless you're actually going to make a full-length story with a plot, characters, story arc, etc. Still, there was branching and it was typo-free but the decisions I made didn't really have much in the way of consequences or rewards beyond what you would expect. 0ne suggestions is that it could have been taken in a more extreme and humorous direction like the movie Reefer Madness to increase readers' interest.

Thanks, it's fast.

There were no details anywhere so it wasn't immersive enough for me, but I also started without anything in the detail department. Still, you should write more and describe in more detail, please.