Escape the Hotel - Gr. 6

(note, I realized the grammar is okay. Just go fix more of it up)

The pacing seemed off at least for the path I took. I went from 1 step at a time to my entire life was revealed and I'm all of a sudden in something entirely different. I would recommend breaking up certain texts allowing it to flow better and the pacing to be more understandable and realistic.

I spotted a capitalization mistake somewhere. Also, this thing's length is inconsistent for no reason. Sometimes a page is as long as the length of my first story's pages. Other times, it's as long as a little wee paragraph that can be finished quickly. Then there are times when the page is a giant wall of text. Just be a bit more consistent. For grammar, go fix it up. For detail, please describe everything in more of it so the story can end up being more immersive and overall better.

Thank you.