FireBorn

It's like almost every other dragon storygame on this site. -_- Add some unique elements.

There are still some noticeable grammar issues, but not too bad.

Descriptions, please. Literally, I think it took two pages for the parents to die. Explain more of what exactly happen, describe feelings at key moments, sounds made, etc, etc.

Just the simplicity of the story and typical-ness of the plot make this story boring. Every dragon story that begins with an egg or hatchling involve them breaking the egg/moving away from nest. Make it unique!

I think that this storygame could be pretty good, despite when you say you have bad English. I suppose some effort was put into the storygame, so I applaud you.

The story was good except for some parts.
The grammar was bad and made it a bit hard to follow.

I almost threw my laptop when I saw that the first two options kill you, then I noticed the little frowny face seemed out of place, hat tip to you my fellow smartass.

This was an awesome story, if your confuse about the double deaths in the beginning actually click on the link rather then just complain the story is broken. I really enjoyed the story and it was a lot of fun to play.

HUMANS ARE THE BEST!!!! >:(

Velly good! Congrats, this was great. Me like velly much-- maybe you could make another to do with the amphibious dragons, or just legends that the main character heard when growingup.

Not bad, I liked the fake-out at the beginning. :)

It was okay...

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This is a really good story. Only problem is he doesn't get air powers anywhere. How will he create worlds with life if he can't manipulate the air he creates to make good conditions for their growth?

Ok, nevermind, please ignore my last comment. I thought this was only 3 pages long because first I got the one sentence death page, then I checked the other page really quick to see what was there, and I mistaking key thought that is was just another lazy ending. 4/8