Go Get The Mail!

I don't know what to think...

So, we definitely have some good humor here, but in the mixture we have heavy doses of lolrandom. Lolrandom humor can be good, but using it extensively (to cover plotholes and leave gaps) is a big no-no for storywriting.

The storygame itself was rather illogical at some points, and a lot of the choices didn't make much sense. The storygame uses a type of reverse psychology, in which doing the exact opposite of what you should is the best option at some points.

The neighborhood did seem like one of a kind. A bully that doesn't mind killing you, murderous rabbits, dogs that can result in your death...

It was a good plot. I loved the idea of making such a simple task into a storygame. Not many authors can do such a thing.

The setting could have been fleshed out a bit more as well.

I liked the character development (although there wasn't a lot), but I was able to feel for these characters I suppose, in a humorous sort of way.

The grammar was nearly perfect. One quick proofreading can fix this.

3/8, pretty average.

Getting the mail has never been more difficult. This story was quite random and humorous, whenever I was making my best attempt on surviving the horrors of the neighborhood. Between the kiler rabbits, dogs, and pretty much... Well, everything else.

This game was rather fun.

Not worth the swim through the sewer

I guess I will just have to do all that in reverse to get back home!

perfect score, funny, relatable, and makes me feel right at home next to to cupcake who doesnt bite

when bullies stop you from getting the mail

It's humorous. Seriously, this game put a smile on my face. Its short passages ensure quick pacing with lots of choices, and the climax of the piece bears a satisfying conclusion to its overall narrative. Satisfyingly conveys themes of perseverance in the face of adversity, even if that means taking the road less travelled and learning to pick your battles.

I love that I can moon the bully. XD

too hard but challenging

Hilarious, ridiculously funny, and very puzzling. It took me a long time to solve, but it was very fun!