Your Trip on the Underground RailRoad
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Player Rating
1.95/8
"Too few ratings to be ranked"
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16 ratings
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Story Difficulty
4/8
"March in the swamp"
Play Length
1/8
"Make sure not to blink"
Maturity Level
1/8
"Appropriate for all ages"
Stories with this maturity level will not, by design, have any potentially objectionable content. An example of a type story with this rating would be a quiz on mathematics.
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Charles
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escape the evil hands of slavery with the use of the Underground Railroad
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Okay, I agree with LeoScales7 on the web address. If you were to turn it into a hyperlink, though, it might be more acceptable. It would also benefit you to remove the 'End Game' link from the starting page. There are plenty more instances where you provide us with two or more choices, one of which leads directly to a ratings page. Don't do that. Links leading to the rating page should only appear on 'ending pages', where you state that the character has died or reached some sort of winning/losing condition. To do otherwise is considered bad pacing. Pacing is considered by the admins when determining if a game violates site standards. The admins can automatically delete a game if it has a rating of 1 after a week (or a rating of 2 and a length of 1).
Long story short, you did put some effort into this game, clearly, so it is probably in your best interests to unpublish this game quickly and implement the changes that the others have suggested. The more quickly you do that, the better your chances of salvaging the games rating. Most of the people who have already rated have given it low scores and will not rate again.
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jamescoker1226
on 3/3/2015 8:24:17 AM with a score of 0
In addition to the comments below about lack of length and sufficient explanations for bad-ends, I just have one question: WHY IS THERE A WEB ADDRESS IN YOUR GAME??!!!
Just...no...please don't do such a thing. Secondly, if you would have even just added some basic information about the bad-ends (and why they are so) within the story, and gave more descriptive choices, this probably could have a been a 3 or 4 out of eight.
You have the power to fix this, so I suggest that you do (though of course, that's your choice).
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LeoScales7
on 3/3/2015 5:46:02 AM with a score of 0
It's too jarring to just force us into the rating screen at every game over with no explanation of what happened to us or why. Even game overs need to be explained, man.
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Kiel_Farren
on 3/3/2015 12:25:10 AM with a score of 0
I like the idea... but it was short, you have no idea what happened to you if you went by your self, stayed on the plantation, the grammar was choppy, and what is with the link?, why on the planet earth does it just go to the rating screen, instead of saying what happened to you and giving you the option to go back?!?! this is one of the worse one's I've played, but the idea was great! just have some one review it and make a few changes, and I'll give you a higher score
2/10
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— anna on 3/2/2015 10:06:02 PM with a score of 0
Not terrible but also not quite an immersive world of detail highlighting the suffering and subjugation of millions of people for hundreds of years but an ok start :)Grammar is a bit choppy in places and this story could use more detail but I can see some decent effort here.
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Will11
on 3/2/2015 8:00:34 PM with a score of 0
You know I don't get why they call it the Underground Railroad since it was neither Underground nor on a rail... It should've been called the above ground normal road.
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Briar_Rose
on 3/2/2015 7:24:03 PM with a score of 0
Is this your first game? If it is, I'm actually pretty surprised. This was short overall, but has some background knowledge in the story. I'd like if you put quotation marks and some more details on each page. If you'd like to have some advice, just pm me!
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WarriorCatsRPStories
on 3/2/2015 5:50:24 PM with a score of 0
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