Choose your Life

Well... that was terrible. Here's why:

PLOT: Well, this game is "choose your life" however, little choice is actually offered. The first few pages of the game are literally "You are a girl. You are tomboy", which doesn't exactly scream RP. You did include a few choices, but they were unrealistic. I clicked run away on the second choice, randomly found money, then became a rich scientist. Basically, your story left my brain yelling "WTF?"

ITEMS: Your use of items to say yes was just annoying. I understand toying around with items to get the mechanic, but if you're going to to do that it's generally better to just use actual items. If you're a young tomboy, why not include a slingshot or something like that to get into trouble or play or whatever it is you come up with? That would include an element of diversity without causing the reader to have to use items for no reason (which trust me, will make you drop in the ratings).

LENGTH: Well, really there wasn't any. Your pages were fairly short - I seem to recall seeing some with 3 lines apiece. The game wasn't long (in regards to page #) at all either, and the combination of the two makes it look like you don't put effort into your storygames regardless of how accurate that statement actually is.

Also, I didn't include this in my rating process because that would be wrong, but you should watch what you rate other stories. You give just about everything an 8, while otherwise the normal votes would be a 4.

2/8

This is bad. Nice to see it's unpublished.

Uhm what. Just. Happened.

SUCKS! Grammar issues, too short, and not enough choice and variety.

This game is not educational at all! My kid played this and she got depression and trauma. I would not recommend this game to anyone of any age. This also influenced my kid to make bad choices, she used to an A+ student but is now a bad student and I sent her to boarding school. Although, this was interesting in it's own ways. So, my overall rating is 2/10.

I HATE DIS

this is a masterpiece my teacher tryed to play it in class and then abruptly hung himself on the ceiling

NEED TO BE LINGer

THIS IS SUCH A BULLSHIT GAME FRRR like theres no fucking options

Its got like no options.