Love & Dating
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played 33,264 times (finished 1,991)
"walk in the park"
"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"
"aren't you a little too old to be trick or treating"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG-13.
In this game you play April, a pretty co-ed who has been dumped by her boyfriend. Now she is ready to find new guy and your going to help her!
I noticed many grammatical errors in your book, and some dialogues which you added in weren't exactly necessary. I noticed that whenever you turned down a guy, there would be a brief paragraph about April cribbing about Eric dumping her, and that basically is the end of the game. I would change that if I were you, since that makes the game short and uninteresting as we would want another candidate to date. Like, when April was crying underneath the tree, another man could have comforted her, and then they could have fallen in love and you would have another ending. You see?
This game was somewhat amusing to me, and I liked it. Just work on your grammar, add more intricate details, and the plot wasn't really that strong nor did you develop your characters that much, so I would work on that if I were you.
I see that you put some effort in this, so well done. This certainly isn't the worst nor the best, but if you put more time and sweat into this game, it can certainly be better.
on 11/10/2017 1:37:10 PM with a score of 0
I like it but...it could use some work.please
-- Shannon on 1/4/2021 2:36:09 PM with a score of 0
Grammatical errors. But, OK. It was short. Wish it was longer. Time flied by pretty fast.
on 12/15/2020 6:48:56 PM with a score of 0
THIS WAS SO STUPID AND BORING
-- Emma on 12/14/2020 11:19:12 AM with a score of 0
-- Enma on 11/28/2020 12:55:30 AM with a score of 0
Fun to read
on 8/18/2020 9:11:33 AM with a score of 0
its a bit boring but good in a way. wish it was longer
on 7/19/2020 10:53:25 PM with a score of 0
It lasted 30 seconds even when I chose carefully. It's okay, though.
on 4/22/2020 8:36:16 PM with a score of 0
good...for you to poop on, and then let it get ruined, in other words, stay far far, far, far, far, far away from this.
-- Emma on 4/14/2020 12:17:53 PM with a score of 0
It is sooo short and it was toooo easy this is crap
on 2/16/2020 4:09:06 PM with a score of 0
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