Dave: Big Dickin'it adventure!
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"trek through the forest"
"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 18. If this were a movie, it would probably be R.
Dave goes to work, will it be another day at the office or something different
It wasn't terrible. It's one of those 'random' games. It's pretty funny at points and there are quite a few branches. That said, it really could have done with proofreading. There was a noticeable lack of capitalisation and punctuation, especially speech marks. A little bit more description and backstory wouldn't hurt, either. This has potential to be better.
on 10/11/2014 3:05:27 AM with a score of 0
I don't know if this is meant to be so... random, and I don't know if I'm offending you in any way, but this is a bit confusing.
Maybe I'd talk about the grammar first. Please, just please capitalise the letter at the start of a sentence. It makes it look neater. The tense is alright, I guess.
Might as well describe the character and his surroundings more. Who is he? Where is he and what is he planning? What is his goal? Going to work? Oh.
Has two to three options, which is okay, I guess. But maybe when the reader goes on the wrong path, you could make a path which leads them back to the right path, and one continuing to the wrong path.
Other than all of that, I think it's just a little too random, getting a sort of flying machine suddenly and get a message and the game ends.
The writing was actually good, and at some points it was funny. I saw that you actually put effort into it. Rated 3/8
on 6/28/2019 11:25:25 AM with a score of 0
This is goofy, but lacks a real plot. Another thing: your grammar could use a lot of work. You don’t add periods at the end of sentences, and you have quite a few run-on sentences.
It wasn’t horrible, however. You have good branching, and your story makes people laugh. The problem is, your story lacks plot and is hard to get wrapped up in.
Length is also a problem, as it is very short. I completed it in about a minute, and got through all the paths in about three minutes. Overall, a good 4/8. Not the best, but certainly not the worst.
on 4/26/2019 11:31:55 AM with a score of 0
This was mildly entertaining, but it was kind of a waste of my time. It felt sort of half-assed and unfinished. It reminds me of one other story I read long ago, but I can't remember what it was.
on 1/16/2018 12:06:10 PM with a score of 0
It's random and confusing. Seriously. And the grammatical errors and spellings errors made it even more confusing. You go from sitting in traffic to fighting a sith crab person, to being the king of a city in space. Honestly, it'd be a 2 or 1 out of 8 if it wasn't so hilarious. The total nonsensical nature makes it rather entertaining, although it still doesn't make any sense.
on 12/2/2017 8:52:27 PM with a score of 0
That was so random and barely comprehensible.
on 6/17/2017 7:03:12 PM with a score of 0
This was actually very entertaining. This is gonna be my guilty pleasure storygame from now on. 4/8
on 3/24/2016 2:45:20 AM with a score of 0
Save the princess get married and your boss is like "hey you coming in today or what?" Also, you win a spaceship and just ditch the batmobli, I don't think so.
on 5/12/2015 11:33:00 AM with a score of 0
What just happened? Kinda funny though
on 3/29/2015 5:55:52 PM with a score of 0
Bunna bunny bunna bunna hat jedi with ninja son XD
on 7/19/2014 12:14:24 AM with a score of 0
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