Empty Space

I’m not sure I understand what’s happening here. I read the intro page and I expected this to be a game that had links back to the start when you hit the end. Well, I played through and there was no link back to the start. So I’m not sure what happened or what I’m actually supposed to do. I get that the story is supposed to be random, but there does come a point when it might be a little bit too random.

I’m not sure I understand the point of the game over links. Were they supposed to tell me something? Was I supposed to learn from them? I did not. There was a lot of, well, nothing here. I mean I kind of get that that’s the purpose of the story, but there’s really so little here and it’s so random that I don’t understand the point. I mean, I even found the so-called “true” ending, but it still didn’t make any sense whatsoever. Maybe that was the point, but this seemed quite a bit too out there to connect with on any level. Maybe something more along a reveal at the end about what was happening, or where you were, or where you were going, or where you ended up, or heck, just about anything more would have been nicer because it would have at least had a completed ending.

Ummm... What exactly do I get from this? All I feel I get from this is .001 IQ for solving the riddle on my first try (not the first "Game Over". It would be my third "Game Over" that I won).

You have to die at least twice, eh? You just scared most people away from actually trying to beat the game with those death links. Some might, but others will just farm points from you. Basically, game over links like the ones here are bad.

The way you have some of the words written (in a column; good example: Where it said "come" and you tried to ask what's happening or whatever) is unique, and easy for my eyes to just travel down, though a bit overdone in some places. This relates to paragraph breaks. Please just try to make words from the same sentences all in one (not present in above example) paragraph.

It seems like a storygame based off a riddle to me. Have I missed something? All that happened was die twice and riddle. Um. Please expand. Your writing could be more interesting, and get rid of the early death links. They're very annoying because they force the story to be linear.
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Your grammar wasn't bad, but the pages were short and the game in itself was rather confusing. It had the potential to turn into a great mystery story if you had extended the pages.

Anyway, due the potential it had and the somewhat decent grammar, I'll rate this 3/8.

Hmm... random choices on the first page, hey? I’ll go left.

Game Over

WTF???

I felt the urge to give this a 1 right there, but I read through the rest of the story, which sucked. Then I gave it a 1.

No... Just no. >.<

Absolute waste of my time. My 5 year old daughter tells better stories while she's on the toilet.

It was annoying to have to keep going back to start manually. Perhaps it would be a good idea to add a link on the End Game pages that allows you to go back to start. That would also add to the trippy, dreamlike effect of the game.

Completely nonsensical. Every failure just feels frustrating and every success is confusing.

What is this even supposed to be about?

I like it