Player Comments on Joining the Almighty Koopa King! (Bowser)

Why would Mario be sleeping on a drawbridge? Really? A sleeping pill?

Seems like you randomly have stuff that you got, just for the game.

Very short and extremely linear, there is one ending. Except for one time, at the start, right when you pick the wrong choice, your dead. And usually there is only two choices, so that makes it a little boring.

And what's the point of the berries? It never says you got hungry.

Grammar and spelling where good, though. If you worked on it more it would have turned out okay.

So harsh but awesome plot twist: Luigi comes and kicks everyone's asses

Well, okay then.

Slave....for life um....

i finallly captured mario

i went the wrong path

Wow. That was terrible. I'm not even kidding.

I played twice & got the same, exact, stupid, rushed ending. It's gay. The goomba part is moderately funny though. I recommend you play something different.

Grammar needs improvement. Also, it was linear, which is hardly ever good on a CYOA site. Atleast give the illusion of choice, instead of right and wrong pages - the wrong ones leading to your immediate death.

3/9

Great! Very little grammar or spelling mistakes in this story.

I awe a good story and I think you can know what it is like to wordfor bowser

ehh...

It was good, very simple and straightforward. nice if you want a quick game to play.

Err... Nope!

Well, I liked that it was set in the Mario world, and the descriptions of the characters. Am I a goomba?

@_¤

*pukes*

Kinda cute, but I was a little disappointed that you didn't get to fight Mario at the end and instead you just toss him a sleeping pill as soon as you find him.

short

pretty fun.... short though

I liked it. Short, but fun.

This is... interesting.

Huh? What kind of jug would hold enough water to bloat Petey? For that matter how could the character carry that water with little effort? You don't describe when you get it. All of a sudden, "Oh yeah by the way you got this stuff from Bowser". Why not just tell that Bowser gave you items when he does? Is it really necessary to eat berries? Shouldn't there be an ignore option? Most important thing though is the koopa following you. Telling the reader something that the main character shouldn't know almost always kills a story. The ending is very anticlimactic. One thing I did like was discovering Bowser's traps.

thanks, to be frank, if I was in the mario universe i'd most likey work for bowser.

Worth every cent. 6/8

Ah, this is fun. It feels good to play the bad guy in the Mario Universe for a change. 5/8

Fun, but linear.

Nice storyline.

Well written but very linear. Not too bad.

Pretty linear but entertaining.

I killed mario :]

Decent.

not bad.

Being a regular Mario fan I knew how to defeat the Pirana, but I got too comfy and goofed up later. Nice job with being tricky! This was cool...I'm gonna play again!

too linear. gotta make unlinear games, people!!

Yay im a hand! And not just any hand a second hand! WOOHOOO! ....play shinobi fight!

weird game i give it a 5-10

Quite Boring. 2.5/10

Weirdly funny

AWSOME GAME

much better story telling. congrats. however, you need to make more paths. there is no adventure unless you can go multiple ways and end the game in different places without dying. keep improving though.

your style's getting better, but you're still way too linear. there should be more than one way to move on in the story, not "pick the wrong link and you're dead." Still you're writing's better in this one, and it's more enjoyable. still bad.

It adds events not in Mario games with Mario games. Original I might add. I like it. A little linear though.