Player Comments on Marvel Adventure

It was short, but very cute. There a ton of inconsistencies with Marvel, but it's a fanfic so who really cares. Very fun to play, hope you and your nephew had fun writing it.

I want Ace Combat

This was cute

Pretty quick tbh

Adorable. I once offered to write a story for my nine year old nephew... except he wanted me to be the villain in it, so he could beat me up. Good times.

If you saw my last comment, I made a mistake and meant to give it an 8/10.

wow. I never expected Spider-Man to kill someone. Your nephew has talent!

6/10

Very short, but it's kind of nice how you worked on this together. ^-^

HORRIBLE! Boring and obnoxious to play. No creativity at all!

OK. I read through every line and thought that it was okay. As a Marvel critic, I must explain my troubles with this story.
Let's start with Captain America. In his story line, he needs to defeat Black Cat. Black Cat is from the Spiderman line, but you may have wanted to mix things up. In Black Cat's movie that is coming out in Spiderman: The Heist, she has been an enemy, ally, and even a love interest in Spiderman, so again, you may have just wanted to mix things up. But when you are Captain america, there is an option to attack Black Cat. In doing so, you launch your shield at her. This is the point in which I am confused. Why? Because Captain America's shield is made of vibranium, a tough source that is known to be "unbreakable" or "impenetrable," but this was proven wrong when Iron Man cracked the shield in Captain America: Civil War. Yet when he launches the shield at her, she steals it and throws it back. Captain America has a vibranium shield, which means that it would be super heavy. I mean, even he has to direct his body weight into a forward motion just to throw it far, and he has the super-soldier serum! So I find it hard to believe that she could just pick it up, throw it, and kill him. See what I mean?
The next one would be Spiderman. This is just a question. Which Venom was it? There are multiple Venom's. This is because Venom is just a symbiote and latches on to multiple different hosts.
I get that this was just made by a 6 year old (with help from Avery/Briar) so I shouldn't go on to long about every small mistake.
Overall, I enjoyed the story and I think that your nephew has a great Marvel mind.

I love the fact your family supports you.

This is the shortest short story ever.

it was definitely cute

This was very cute!
The endings were all very good!
Tell your nephew to keep up the good work!

This is so cute!!

It was amazing. I loved it. I had a lot of fun and it made me smile. Tell your nephew he's a good story teller.

Awwwww! So cute!

Thanks for this simple but enjoyable story. It is pretty much what I'm hoping to do for my nieces and nephews. I want them to share in my love of storytelling and gaming.

Way too short

I loved how cute this game was. It was filled with childish elements which I adored. Tell your nephew that he can be a future writer one day with that brilliant mind of his.

All stories should always say this at the end: You died. You made the wrong choice. Try again. I can only find this element in your book so far, and I love how cute the book is! ^w^

The fact that he clearly identified the wrong endings makes things so much easier. I wish people did that in their other similarly linear stories "You died. Pick the other choice." The simplicity and clarity are awesome.

I love kids! ^-^

no way this game sucks

I have to admit, the childish writing was actually quite cute.

This is the best story ive ever read

its really short and not much effort

Tell the kid this is wow.
You cannot breath. You died. The wrong ending. You are dead. The end.- LOL
And this is really fun!!!

nice

This was brilliant for a six year old. I think he could grow up to be an author! 4/8!

This made me smile. :) Not bad for a six-year-old. I especially loved the line, "You died. The wrong ending. You are dead. The end."

that was short and had limited chices

uhhhhh... short... i mean i know it was by a little kid but... 3/8

It's Okay

Its alright, I really like that you choose your superhero though

Too short.

Uhh, that was quick

What's up with Mrs. Marvel ending so simple and two pages since it was the only woman

Short and sweet

Alright, so spiderman kills venom and it's happily ever after? Wow. Oh we'll, he IS only a little kid. Nevertheless, I give this a 3/8

Oh my... well a little boy with quite the random, adventurous imagination certainly wrote this! :) ~E

He's very, VERY blessed to have you as his aunt . . . It's amazing what innocent minds can come up with (sometimes it's not so innocent!) ~A

This was done by your nephew, so I'm not even gonna say anything. :/

Heroes rarely kill there villeins, all the villeins die in this game, also it's clearly the writing skills of a little kid. (Not just because Briar Rose tells you so.)

Why did I rate this so highly the first time? Children, I guess. Anyway, I came across this "little gem" on that thread about minimum standards from months ago...

... And I'm a little disappointed with the rating system. This story, on its own, doesn't deserve a 4/8 (sorry, Briar's nephew. I'm sure you're cute.). I'm reasonably sure that this only got rated so highly purely by virtue of the fact that
a) Most folks don't want to bash a small child's story
b Briar_Rose wrote this

are the only reasons that this is rated 4/8. It's childishly written, with nonsensical choices and plot. I hate to judge a children's story so harshly, I really do, but this site has standards intended for everyone, and it feels like this story is edging on breaking them. The grammar is all right, I suppose, but the sentences feel... off. They're disjointed and short.

Also, it punishes logical decisions. That's definitely a minus.

All in all, as terrible as I feel right now, I have to give this a 3/8.

Well, actually, Spiderman is owned by Sony.

It is pretty good for a six year old

Haha. Kinda cute.

Played as Captain America. It's short but well done. 5/8 rating

It was over in a few clicks, but it was great for a 6 year old's vivid imagination in a story!

I cannot be Deadpool!!!?? Whaaaa???!!!!

Ahahah BLack Cats here is my boomerrang dididididieeeeee

Good fun :)

In the Captain America way there is something wrong the Black cat is not a guy

to easy

I died before it began... :(

Good for such a young author, reminds me of the first story I wrote when I was ten but I don't seem to remember it even being as good as this :D

Doctor Doom fighting Thor? BLASPHEMY!

Either way, I rated it 8/8.

I have a soft spot for youngsters.

curse you venom

It was very simple and abrupt.

Okay, I guess. Put a smile on my face for being about Marvel. :D ^-^

this is a special game play it ALWAYS I BEG YOU

Ahh, I haven't had a nice new storygame made by a really young person in a long time. Great job Briar's Nephew!

Wow this is poop don't do this one

Your nephew has the right idea. Killing these villains is obviously the most efficient way to maintain order and prevents them from doing anything to disrupt the peace in the future.

Good job.

Lol! Yep, loads of death. My nephew really enjoys the idea of killing badies. About halfway through making the game I asked him, "Uhh... Are you sure you want to kill all the badies? Can't you just take some of them to prison, or make one of them turn into a good guy, or..." But he just went, "Nope! Kill them all!" :p

Quite a bit of death. I like it!

Nice game, i love the marvel universe. this is a good gamer it is better than alot of others i have played recently

Great work Briar's nephew!

trying to imagine captain america in a kitty suit.
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F A B U L O U S

Wow, good story. This indeed proves my theory that a toddler could write better stories than the warrior cats trolls.

Nice, way to go briar's nephew! ^_^

Well done! Not bad for such a young author and puts 99% of the Warrior Cat stories on the site to absolute shame.

I'm so proud of my nephew, the only member of my family whos geekiness rivals my own ^_^