Marvel Universe: Fallen

First of all, I noticed many grammatical errors. You capitalized some parts where it isn't even necessary. There was a lack of detail, and proper punctuation.

The plot structure was quite weak, and also your character development skills in the book. It wasn't that long, and the book seemed to be rushed.

I noticed that you wrote the book in a play-form, which disappointed me a little bit. I mean, you can't really express the character's emotions by writing in play-script. For example, in play-script when someone is suffering from crippling depression, you just write it like this: (Bob sighs and places his head in his lap). In the actual book script you can write it like this: "Why is fate always so unlucky for me?" Bob sighed as he glanced out at the downpour of rain outside. He felt a twinge of anger in his heart, and pure sadness, etc.

There is always room for improvement, and you can certainly try better than this; I believe in you. A touch of humour would be quite nice, and the little touch of romance was well placed. I wish that you just developed their feelings a bit better.

If you plan to make a part two, please add more details, make the story longer, develop the plot and don't rush it, don't write it in playscript and try not to make any grammatical errors, and I assure you that you will get a higher rating than you received on this one.

4/8. Certainly not the worst, but not the best either.

Does not follow EndMaster's guide for a good Pokemon game

There are is one thing wrong with the Marvel story: Hank Pym did not create Ultron nor Vision. Hank Pym created the serum that allows Ant-Man and Wasp to shrink.Tony Stark created Ultron, and Ultron made Vision's body, but Thor brought him to life with a shock from Mjolnir. Otherwise, I think the story is ok.

Kind of short. I noticed a few spelling errors. Otherwise pretty good. I wish there was more meat on this. The writing is really bare-boned

Can't wait for the next one!

Oh good. I died. I'm glad that's over.

Honestly, it was ok, it wasn't too enjoyable though. I know the creator probably doesnt care but this doesn't line up with the mcu at all, seeing that spiderman doesnt join until civil war and vision doesn't survive till the end of infinity war. Also the plot was just kinda everywhere at once. Im not saying its bad, I just, don't really enjoy it.

Omg. This was amazing

I like it alot, buuuuut, I don't like romance. However, I understand but would like to see as little as possible in the second one please.

This was pretty cool!