Player Comments on Orpheus

This game oddly breaks into two halves, the first highly atmospheric but practically devoid of choice aside from choosing what to eat from a refreshment cart--beverages or a loaf of bread (?)--but the prose of that first half is interesting, at least, and offers an interestingly haunting environment. I thought it was going to go somewhere interesting.

However, the story falls apart in the second half, as it becomes an inventory hunt-and-use without any particularly obvious logic to much of it--go places, pick up all the stuff, and try it out in likely places.

The inventory based advancement didn't fit with the atmosphere or the I am so lonely...It hurts...Who are you?...You are so sad" emo of the story. Instead of thinking about the characters, you are instead thinking about which areas you haven't been to and what you haven't used in what location. It's not *hard*, but it's not interesting, and it's very tedious.

It's a shame, too, because there's an authentically interesting idea about death and dreams and loss buried under all the apparatus. The sentence level writing is often a problem, though--spelling, tense, and punctuation errors abound. It's probably worth a read, but its wholly linear quality make it less than satisfying.

Would rate it a 6 except for the inventory rape.

Good one mate

I actually really liked this, it was good.

The atmosphere building was excellent and the pacing was deceptively slow. At the beginning, all was normal. However, as time moved on, things became more and more sinister and strange. Things got weird, but not too weird.

The characters had good dynamics and dialogue that felt real and convincing. Each of the characters felt like an actual person and not just a two dimensional extra.

The thing that took so much away from this game was the fact that the author constantly switches verb tenses. It was enough to throw me off and sometimes was line to line. Other than that and a couple of spelling issues, I really loved it. There's a lot here for its short length. 5/8

its great

SO amazing pls keep making more. Grammar and technicalities not great but the story was captivating

Quite an interesting story, I felt as if the ending was not complete enough, but it was very well developed. I feel a bit of a lack in detail and maybe backstory and memories, but I loved it anyway.

This was AMAZING! I loved how your wrote the book and the idea! The plot was fantastic, and I do love my wife Alice.

Amazing....

That was scary...

Truly excellent writing

Weird but good

:) I liked it very much.

Interesting, it's worth one playthrough but I personally wouldn't do more than that. The ending surprised me but other than that, I was a bit bored.

very creative i liked it!

It ok beides the lack of detail

THIS IS THE BEST STORYGAME IN THE HISTORY OF STORYGAMES

- After she bashes my wifes head in with a rock -
Alice: Yeah, I'm pregnant. The baby's yours.

That sure escalated quickly.

It was a great story you have concocted please contact me if you make more.

It was good despite its being linear until I got to the end. All variants are simply disgusting. Why should I kill anyone and not just sedate or immobilize them? If there were such a variant, I would rather choose "Kill myself".

A modern take on a famous Greek legend. Good work! :)

I like how you control where you want it to go

Not bad ;)

Somewhat skippy and short but cool

Very good, although I would have preferred some more options and it seemed to start & end a little too quick. However, the inventory idea was genius and must congratulate you fully for that.

Short, but very good. I thought it was a little linear at the beginning, but the end was very dramatic.

I played through the two "spouse endings."
A bit of a strange story, and a bit too linear at the beginning, but otherwise it was good.

Great stuff for something from 2 years ago! Heheh I laughed a lot~

I actually like the shortness of the game, it makes it easier for me to replay and absorb what I just played, aha.

very strange ending but fun game

There was some good content...but I found the two endings I ran across to make me decide against this particular game. The one seemed far too shallow, as though no one had any feelings or sensibilities at all. The other just lacked any real description and fell completely flat.

The twist was unexpected...I even thought I could use "the item I got in the Women's Dormitory" at that point, but that was a silly idea. The first part (when he was in transit), was a bit too long, the snack choices (hot chocolate, etc.) do not seem to affect the story, right?

A very good read, nonetheless. :) now I don't feel like sleeping. :p

Plot looks good and promising but story itself ended up too rushed and tiresome, there's many unimportant details. It'd also look great if the many grammar errors could be polished up.

these really sucked

I liked the plot, though I wished it could have been extended more. 6/8

I really liked this story. Would have been nice if it was longer and there were more scenes in the dreamworld though. I thought that was a really cool idea but there wasn't much of it in the game.

This is the first one I played, so I've not got anything to judge it against. But, when I pick one of these up, I want a stunning plot. I just thought this one was...short, and a little lacking in vibrancy and feeling. I was not drawn into it as a reader/participant/player. And I was wanting to be.

It was an interesting piece of work, and I really liked it, but it's a little too linear.

Love it! Very nice job.

maybe longer?

Good. An epilogue would make it better.

Pefect one but so sad!

Ahh, that was scaryy(:

it's beautiful and very dramatic too

Even though there wasn't many choices to make I enjoyed this story. it was interesting.It is good when you just want something entertaining and not too hard. I would recommend it to my friends.

Pretty cool, wish there was more to it.

the concept was interesting, thoughtful, and complimented the poetic, almost lyrical writing style. There were a few technical errors, and a few times I wished you would have gone into a little more detail, but neither is a major detraction from a well crafted story.

I enjoyed it.

Harhar har

What begins as a promising sci-fi thriller quickly turns into an incoherent adventure that is predictable, preposterous, and short on thrills.

Wow.... that was awesome!

I liked it:) 7/8

if only there are more options available...

Spotted spelling mistakes I will be fixing soon.

Thanks for all the comments guys (and gals, don't forget the gals) it really warm my hearts (I think it did, can't remember, my ego may have gotten in the way) when you evaluate my work, as for most of my writing career I wrote for myself, not knowing the extent of my talent.

*Bows Head*

Amazing!

Damn! I actually really, really, really liked this! Great, great job! Your writing created and awesome atmosphere and I actually felt a lot of compassion for my character and connection to Alice. Phenomenal. If this weren't so linear, it would be a 7. I gave it a 6. I'm considering moving it to L&D and featuring it, would you be OK with that?

Very detailed story, unfortunately rather than feeling like an immersive environment, it ends up feeling like a tedious chore to wade through page after page of unnecessary text to find the correct way to advance.

If I am a widow, how can Alice be pregnant with my child? I seriously thought I was female for a good portion of the story.

I didn't care for the story too much, can't really put my finger on why. Also there were some grammatical errors, several wrong tenses, and a male widow is known as a widower

ok, only three endings that i could find, its still pretty good.

please dont complain tht this story is linear, it has several endings and has a warning that it is somewhat linear. its a realy well done story.

too linear :(

Good first story

Good:
1. Mood
2. Writing
3. Main plot ideas

Bad:
1. Spelling
2. Linear- lack of differentiation between storylines, especially early on
3. Various bugs- playtest every link and you'll see what I mean

Ugly:
1. What's the point of the apple? And why did it disappear after I went to my room to sleep??
2. Why must I give Alice an orange to go to sleep???

i would have rated it even higher if it werent for the large number of conjagation errors. its was very good and very creative. well done! especally for a first story game. im looking forward to seeing more. if the mistakes in here are fixed its bound to be well received.