The Boy Who Died From Eating All His Vegetables
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Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 10. If this were a movie, it would probably be between G and PG.
A project for my English III class, titled "The Boy Who Died From Eating All His Vegetables"
Ha! I actually really enjoyed it! :D
The idea, while lolrandom, was really creative and had me laughing. It was a good, original idea and I would definitely want to read more from the author!
I was hesitant, because it seemed really random, like one of those games that try to be funny but fail, but there was a fair amount of detail I guess and it felt well fleshed out in my opinion.
It's not the longest storygame, but I guess it's not easy to make a 100 page storygame about a boy dieing from eating vegetables. Despite not having a huge number of pages, there were more then a few sentences on each page.
I can understand that this story is too strange for some people, but I enjoyed it :D
on 3/10/2017 7:00:03 PM with a score of 0
I liked this, well written and different. It seems you might have chosen a more exciting premise for a story this well written but I guess it's semi-autobiographical or at least inspired by real events as some of the best stories are. You have a knack for writing but I think the endings could have been better and it's unfortunate that, as in real life, there is no way to get out of eating your vegetables in the end.
on 1/9/2015 3:05:26 AM with a score of 0
— Ruhina on 5/5/2023 8:43:40 AM with a score of 0
That was kind of funny.
on 5/2/2023 4:19:27 PM with a score of 0
I think that this philosophical novel was a very nice choice for my students to read about gastronomic events. 5/8 because my student didn't really like the death of Willy and they didn't like cauliflower too. You are the reason the gene pool needs a lifeguard. Good luck with your life.
— mr. happy on 4/15/2023 10:41:54 AM with a score of 0
Willy Atkins was my son. How could you do this to him? I loved that boy, and you sliced him to BITS! Curse you. Curse you for the rest of your days!
— Vinister the Prime Minister on 1/23/2023 1:15:27 PM with a score of 0
— Kaysen on 1/23/2023 1:14:43 PM with a score of 0
it was cool and gory
— jesse on 8/12/2022 1:34:01 PM with a score of 0
it was pretty bland and short, it would be more interesting if there were more variables/outcomes.
— Niko on 8/9/2022 3:28:41 PM with a score of 0
Nice story, but one little tip. Don't be afraid to just use tge word "said" in dialogues, it makes the whole story flow nicer.
You don't have to use every synonym in the world, mkst readers gloss over the word said, but other words halt the flow of dialogue and can kinda be distracting if you use it too often.
This is the most apparent example I picked out.
"It looked like broccoli." Richard noted.
"But it was white! Do you think it came from aliens?" Bonnie questioned.
"My mommy is a doctor and she said vegetables can kill you, do I won't eat it." Scott proudly stated.
"Your mom wouldn't say that! It's not true!" Willy responded.
Otherwise, fun humor, it made me chuckle and it's definitely child friendly!!!
on 10/28/2021 5:51:58 AM with a score of 0
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