The Carnival, Ginny, and I

Player Rating3.66/8

"#552 overall, #53 for 2016"
based on 86 ratings since 09/11/2018
played 447 times (finished 32)

Story Difficulty3/8

"trek through the forest"

Play Length3/8

"A nice jog down the driveway"

Maturity Level4/8

"need to be accompanied by an adult"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG.

This is the story of Ginny and Ethan's times at the carnival. As the years pass, can Ginny and Ethan's friendship continue or will their paths no longer intertwine? Will Ethan overcome his avid dislike of roller coasters?

Can their friendship bloom into something greater?

Okay, after viewing the comments, I too realized the massive error I had created in the original ending. Thank you Briar Rose, Bucky, and Steve24833 for you comments. I truly mean that. In fact, I burst out laughing (at my story) when I read the comments,especially Briar Roses. Thank you.

Now, there are two endings. The first is the original (with a few small changes), and the new one is much different from the other one. (They also wrote to each other because this story took place before the internet became widely public.)

Player Comments

Well I enjoyed that game, I thought it was a really sweet little young love, coming of age story... But what the hell was up with the ending? So these guys haven't seen each other for 5 years, they're not even dating, even the trip to the carnival doesn't seem like it's supposed to be a date, and he asks her to marry him? That's a creepy guy right there. How about, "I really like you, can I take you out for dinner sometime?" That's a nice place to start right? I mean after meeting an old friend for the first time in five years, most guys don't just use marriage proposals as a way to break the ice.
Also, how the hell did he get the Dad's permission? I imagine that being a weird conversation. "Hi kid, haven't seen you in awhile. What do you want?" "I want to marry your daughter!" "Really? I didn't know you guys were dating." "Well, we're not exactly, I actually haven't seen her for years, but she was my first childhood crush and I just assume she's stayed single this whole time in the hopes that I might come back and propose... Hopefully she grew up to be hot, or else I'll have to lose her in the hall of mirrors and run for my life." "... Well I'm sold! Give me a hug son-in-law!"
-- Briar_Rose on 2/5/2016 7:04:59 AM with a score of 0
Ok, so this story feels incredibly forced, both emotionally and in a linear sense.

The author essentially shoves the reader down the path (s)he wants them to follow. There really isn't much choice involved. And many of the choices that lead to 'End Game' don't make sense. Why would not admitting unmitigated terror of riding the roller coaster lead the player character to a life as a gas station worker? Especially, when the girl already knows the player character hates roller coasters and is terrified of them? Not to mention, there is a one click 'End Game' link. Why even make that a choice then?

As far as the emotions go, I can see and respect what the author is going for, but the execution misses the mark. They just don't really establish a solid flow or meld well into the story. Again, they feel rather heavy handed. The romance and passion of a story should feel natural. The story seems to lack substance, and the characters don't really add much to help this.

There were a few spelling/grammar errors: but nothing particularly glaring.

Now, I know it seems like I'm ripping this story fairly hard, but despite the flaws, I wanted to like it. I really wanted to. The author has the bones of a good story, but the writing needs to be expanded and present the emotional components in a smoother fashion.
-- Bucky on 2/5/2016 1:48:40 AM with a score of 0
Aw, Ginny is an adorable little bean of energy and pure joy.

This storygame is perfect for Valentines' Day and teaching people about how your words and actions toward that particular person can change over time. I read the original ending, and I'm glad you made a new one. Ethan is the nervous boy who wants to be cautious while Ginny is an adventurer and loves taking risks. Two perspectives, one story. Sure, there were some small grammar mistakes, but it's nothing that can't be fixed.

Keep up the good work.
-- AestheticLlama on 2/15/2020 4:20:52 PM with a score of 0
Ohmygod. I loved it! I about cried.
-- BigTimeRush on 10/4/2019 8:09:07 AM with a score of 0
Great job ??
-- LukeBlaze on 12/18/2017 5:16:27 AM with a score of 0
really beautiful story
nice job
-- delta1324 on 8/7/2017 9:52:56 AM with a score of 0
Would have liked if it was a bit longer, it was really pulling me in
-- Dark_Storm on 8/1/2017 8:59:06 AM with a score of 0
Fun. Although i agree with peeps that the original ending felt kinda rushed.
-- TheFairManOfNeverland on 2/21/2017 7:21:52 PM with a score of 0
I found this game mostly cute, fluffy, and light-hearted romance, which was enjoyable as long as I didn't think too hard. Granted, by issues with most Love & Dating games still apply - there are parts were the romance felt a bit formulaic, and other parts were the relationship development felt a bit rushed, but all in all, the quality of the writing was good and the setting is enough fun to carry the story despite the use of some childhood best friend clichés.
-- the_quiller on 2/28/2016 12:15:07 AM with a score of 0
-- XBaconRebellionX on 2/21/2016 10:23:59 AM with a score of 0
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