veangance quest

The plot is interesting. The writing needs to be expanded upon. The grammar/spelling just spoiled the effect of the whole thing. If you cleaned up the grammar and formatting and added more details, this might be a lot better storygame.

A strong first effort. Could be greatly improved with attention to spelling and punctuation, not to mention the fact that nearly every page says "This is a new page." I would have liked to hear more details -how the hero came into possession of the sword, why this fleshy creature lives only miles from normal towns, etc. Pretty good description of the "superwarrior," though he could have had a better title. Make another one and spend a bit more time.

you guys need to work on your grammar what the hell

Quite dumb and short.

This is a new page.
It was pretty interesting, I guess.

Really needs some editing, decent idea, please work on it

The "This is a new page" on every page was a nice touch.

It was okay. The randomness was extreme and I kept on getting killed for doing seemingly random things like staying at a nice hotel or not sleeping in a suspicious cottage. It's not bad but to frustrating for it's own good.

very........strange

Good story and well written. I'd like to see more detail about the lead characters background and motivations.