Z is for Zombies

I like the tutorial at the start, that’s nice to explain what’s about to happen. Some people don’t like them, but well, that’s personal opinion. I think my favorite is when reading the “instructions” is an option on the first page. But this one works for me. On to the story!

I like the start and the setup. First person works well for me in these stories. I like the waking up to immediate action. Nice introduction to the other characters. There could have been a little more there with more detailed descriptions, but at least I’ve got their names so far. I agree with mizal on the items – once upon a time, picking up items was a key part and interface on this site. These days you can use a little bit of code and automatically pick them up if you want to have items. If you do a little more scripting, you don’t even have to use items, though they can be fun at times.

I like the page length and the choices. I at least feel like my choices (like getting the gun) are having real effects on the story. I appreciate the descriptions – they make it easy for me to picture the action in the story and make me feel like I’m part of the story. Minor typo on “The Dollar Bill” page: in paragraph 4, it says, “he ribcage” and I think that should be “the ribcage.”

Nice job on the hotel and exploration. I liked wandering about and finding stuff. I’m not sure what to do with a combination of toothpaste and beans, but it sounds like fun. Another minor typo on “Done searching” page: paragraph 10, “you all train after.” I think maybe “you all trail after” might be what was meant there. The vodka page was a little confusing since I was given the vodka at the start of the page, but the story continued, and then I had to click on the vodka bottle to pick it up. That’s a great place where a script to put the bottle in your inventory would be great.

The story continues nicely with good options and details. I was confused on the page, “Stomp Em!” because my only choice was “2.” I’m not sure what that means. I liked the choice when I had to pick one person to help or the other just because it forced me to make a choice that appears to affect the story. The taser, well, doesn’t look a lot like a taser…

I also like that there are a number of different ways to go and different endings. It was a lot of fun picking different choices and then going back later and trying other choices – to me that’s one of the best parts of the choose your own story. I found it interesting that the story really kept going for awhile if you made good choices! I thought I did good, getting up to 23 skill points, but I still got a bad ending. I will certainly try again!

I highly encourage those who haven't read this to give it a go, and leave a comment.

The story surprised me a bit, as it felt rather well put together, the pacing felt decent, and the descriptions helped immerse me in the story. It was just well written, which is always nice to see.

The story did seem somewhat linear, but with that said, there are still different endings. Also the variables actually get used throughout, which made them feel meaningful.

Further, the items are also actually used, which is nice. However, I was disappointed when I found out that some items had the default image, which made me think that the author might have rushed somewhat towards the end to publish this. I'm just not sure why they got images for the earlier items but not for the later ones.

Overall, I'd say what is here is good, but could be better. As such I highly encourage the author to keep writing, for as long as they strive to keep improving, I'm sure they will end up being capable of making some really great stories.
(But to be fair, if they can continue to output work of this quality, I'd still be pretty happy).

Got a good ending 😌

Very good. Made me feel like I was actually there. Would recommend to newcomers.

Coolio

This was fantastic! It's not too long or too short, and I like how it starts the reader out with some action.

Using the items as one of the choices was new to me, but I really liked replaying this and discovering their value.

There are a few grammar mistakes here and there, but nothing too serious; it still reads quite well! Keep up the good writing, and thank you for an awesome story!

Very realistic zombie story

I feel like this story is a great example of a 5 out of 8 story. It was good not great. I liked what it did but it seemed to lack a certain... Spark or flare to truly be great. Definitely not a waste of time solid overall.

WOW all that and there was nothing in the farm? SERIOUSLY

Got the good Ending now still really good