Empathy

Player Rating3.63/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"
based on 51 ratings since 02/28/2016
played 260 times (finished 56)

Story Difficulty2/8

"walk in the park"

Play Length2/8

"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"

Maturity Level1/8

"appropriate for all ages"
Stories with this maturity level will not, by design, have any potentially objectionable content. An example of a type story with this rating would be a quiz on mathematics.

Tags

My first game. Pretty simple game about meeting a strange girl with a rabbit.

Player Comments

This was quite emotional, I liked it.

Your writing was powerful and despite this being a short story, I wouldn't call the feelings that I felt at the end to be simple :)

Both of the characters had sad stories, and the writing does a good job to portray them both as sympathetic. I liked that despite how short this was overall, you managed to make it both descriptive and engaging. Well done.

But while this is a wonderful little short story, it's not really a cyoa at all. I think that all of the choices do lead to the same destination at the end, so I would've liked that the little choices that were present had a bit more of a impact to the story. I certainly think that such a thing could have been pulled off, because this writing does show some promise.

At the end of the day, this was a very emotional short story. But I would like to see a bit more from you as a writer and how well this can be placed into another storygame.
-- TharaApples on 3/25/2017 12:24:04 AM
I think what you have written is good and engaging, but it is basically two short scenes. I think if you expand this story a lot (make it a whole new story as ratings don't go away with unpublishing and republishing), giving more choices and more description of each event, this could blossom into something great.
-- Future on 2/29/2016 3:52:28 AM
This is quite a nice story though slightly unusual but refreshingly original which was nice. You have real writing talent here and I think you are good at drawing emotion out of the reader which leads me to suspect a Love and Dating story is out there somewhere waiting for you to write it... :) Overall quite a nice little short story.
-- Will11 on 2/28/2016 6:57:54 PM
Kind of a snow clone... but it still made me feel a tingle, so that's good! You should try to improve your writing. I know you can do it! :D

-Charaxes
-- Charaxes on 8/21/2016 11:08:02 PM
Pretty good.
-- Elt_1080 on 5/20/2016 9:49:41 AM
The choices don't change anything... It was an alright short story, but this is CYS. You get to make choices that IMPACT the story. The grammar was ok at best, but the story was also extremely short.
-- mattstat716 on 3/11/2016 10:40:11 AM
I really can't call this a CYOA, the two choices don't effect anything so it's basically just a short story, but still very sweet and sad and creative. I look forward to seeing what you could do with a full length story.

Grammatically this one does need to be cleaned up though, as Steve pointed out there's a lot of problems with random tense and POV switching.
-- mizal on 3/10/2016 8:14:46 AM
This was a short but touching story. I enjoyed it. I wish there was more to it though.
-- ZagHero on 2/29/2016 3:08:17 AM
It wasn't bad. It was very frustrating as it swapped between past and present tense considerably as well as first and second person, but besides that I didn't mind it. It seemed a bit too much angst and sadness for two people, although as a short little emotional piece it was entertaining and shows potential.
-- Steve24833 on 2/28/2016 7:06:04 PM
Nicely written, though i do not like the topic very much. It is worth a try.
-- reader73 on 2/28/2016 2:19:02 PM
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