Player Comments on Exploding Alarm Clock - Return that item!
The premise of this game is, well, a little odd, but sometimes that can make a game interesting and fun! It was interesting, too, when I tried to return the clock and it continued to explode. I can absolutely see the customer service folks acting exactly like the one in the story. Are you sure this isn’t a real-life experience, or at least based on a true story?
There are some good options in the story, and that’s a great feature for a CYOA story. In this case some of the options link back to sort of push you in one direction, but this story does it in a way that really makes sense and actually works well to enhance the story instead of taking away from the story. It feels like the reader is really in control of the story and able to actually affect the outcome of the story, and that’s exactly how a CYOA should feel.
I tried it a few times and got some different endings, which is also neat. It was slightly random, but it was random in a really entertaining way! Other authors could learn from this story: even though it is pretty short, it still has a fun story (if a bit silly), good writing, and different paths to different endings. Thank you for sharing this story with the site!
on 7/12/2018 11:56:46 AM with a score of 0
Ha-ha! That was pretty fun! I liked the overall concept of the story, which is to return a faulty alarm clock and get your money back. It might sound pretty generic or not even that fun, but trust me, it isn't easy to return a bad clock.
The story itself is very humorous, and at times made me laugh. Very good sense of humor.
The only thing I would have to say is that how could you bring the alarm clock if it explodes? In the story, your clock explodes... so you somehow bring it to the store? And then demonstrate it exploding again? How could you demonstrate if its already in pieces? This part I didn't understand.
But this was still very, very fun. I applaud you, for a very good story!
-- Fazz on 8/3/2014 12:20:12 AM with a score of 0
I did this while I was in my College history class and I actually chuckled out loud. I don’t think the teacher appreciated it but I did... 10/10
-- TheComic on 10/28/2019 1:39:37 PM with a score of 0
This was a ride. But I enjoyed it. 5/8
on 9/16/2019 2:57:37 PM with a score of 0
Amazing and fun
-- cookie on 5/23/2019 7:39:00 AM with a score of 0
This was very good!
I like the overall plot.
on 6/7/2018 7:34:31 AM with a score of 0
Good for a short story. I can’t rate it higher because of its length but it is a great length for the subject.
on 3/19/2018 8:02:28 PM with a score of 0
It's a great and hilarious story!
on 1/14/2018 4:05:20 PM with a score of 0
Shouting Match With Customer Service Lady: The Game.
Seriously, wtf man.
on 11/28/2017 11:45:28 AM with a score of 0
Funniest game on this site, according to me.
-- Jean on 9/9/2017 10:31:14 AM with a score of 0
Got the best ending and it was very entertaining! Loved the silly humour :D
on 1/24/2017 5:30:34 PM with a score of 0
I don't want to be harsh, but this is extremely bad. And why was everyone always screaming or yelling? 2/8
on 11/27/2016 10:39:31 AM with a score of 0
I got my money back after screaming
on 10/16/2016 6:29:33 PM with a score of 0
It's very funny
on 10/16/2016 6:26:05 PM with a score of 0
Wow i spammed it to see all the choices, and... You were the one who made the walmart game??? I LOVED it!!!
on 8/27/2016 4:46:51 PM with a score of 0
Short but this definitely got several laughs and giggles from me. :)
on 7/28/2016 11:28:32 PM with a score of 0
I loved the funny storyline and quick ending. This is the first CYS I've seen that is funny and not stupid and the same time! 6/8
-- Maggie on 7/1/2016 12:45:36 AM with a score of 0
It was actually pretty fun for something really short
-- Person McPerson Face on 5/16/2016 7:50:01 PM with a score of 0
Nice, quick little story with a compact storyline. I like this game, but what is the significance of "airtight"? That's my one issue. Thanks for this!
on 5/6/2016 9:56:26 AM with a score of 0
on 4/24/2016 9:19:15 PM with a score of 0
TERRIBLE! TERRIBLE! Bad game. Avoid at all costs. No rhyme or reason behind anything that goes on in the story.
-- Pelvis Less Key on 3/22/2016 2:00:18 AM with a score of 0
-- Silverflame on 12/28/2015 8:13:27 PM with a score of 0
Good good good good good good good good (keep saying good for 10 years 32 minutes and 7 seconds)
on 11/30/2015 11:50:41 AM with a score of 0
It was REALLY funny, and I loved it! XD Very interesting and fun, even though it was short. I mean, storygames like these kind of have to be short, don't they? Otherwise the readers get bored. So yeah, it was great. :)
on 10/30/2015 1:23:21 PM with a score of 0
I got best ending! This honestly entertained me a bit. A thing you did really good was give logical options and make the descisions really feel like they made a difference. There were a couple broken links I found which lead to a page that had nothing to do with the one I was on. But putting that aside I really think the length of the game was just right and a good amount of text on each page. Not too short, and not too long which is sometimes a turnoff for me because I want to get to the descisions. So yeah, it entertained me for a bit and kept me i gaged for most part, so a 5/8 for me.
on 9/12/2015 12:41:52 AM with a score of 0
It made me laugh, that's 5/8 worthy.
on 8/31/2015 12:31:31 AM with a score of 0
One of the better ones ive seen :D
on 7/25/2015 5:02:54 PM with a score of 0
That was funny!
on 6/28/2015 4:48:03 PM with a score of 0
Pretty good. The writing was fine and this was very funny. I liked it. =)
on 6/3/2015 12:22:01 AM with a score of 0
Hilariously entertaining. I got the best ending. xD
-- Cece The Homestuck And Hetalia on 5/20/2015 10:50:51 PM with a score of 0
Yay best ending
on 5/13/2015 6:29:56 AM with a score of 0
Hilariously brilliant. Good job sir.
on 5/4/2015 9:24:19 PM with a score of 0
I just read this to my kids and we all laughed so hard. This was awesome -- good clean fun! =)
-- Justin on 1/8/2015 11:09:36 PM with a score of 0
on 12/21/2014 12:47:49 PM with a score of 0
it was a fun little game
-- damon on 10/29/2014 3:33:51 PM with a score of 0
It was very interesting and fun to read.
on 10/24/2014 2:19:44 PM with a score of 0
Loved it, totally practical!
on 10/9/2014 9:08:21 PM with a score of 0
Beautiful. One of the best games I've ever played.
on 9/1/2014 7:13:42 AM with a score of 0
Ok that was fun. A jovial story and lighthearted. And I couldn't help but laugh even though a lot of it makes little sense.
on 7/15/2014 2:18:04 AM with a score of 0
ASOUME GAME I GOT ME MONEY BACK!!!
-- CheetahPelt on 7/6/2014 2:38:11 PM with a score of 0
It was a funny game to play.
-- anonymous on 5/31/2014 10:06:26 AM with a score of 0
on 3/8/2014 3:21:36 PM with a score of 0
It wasn't good, but it was still fun. Enjoyed the ending.
on 1/13/2014 1:25:14 PM with a score of 0
You did a good job on this
on 10/29/2013 6:41:50 PM with a score of 0
woow thats part of the best ending remeber me from phoenix wright
on 10/14/2013 7:50:59 PM with a score of 0
You know, this got me to wondering: Is this based on a true story? It does seem semi-probable.
on 5/13/2013 1:41:40 PM with a score of 0
Haha this was awesome
on 4/2/2013 7:55:12 PM with a score of 0
on 3/18/2013 5:52:13 AM with a score of 0
LOL I can actually see a scene like this happening. Nice job.
-- Some guy on 3/10/2013 10:24:35 PM with a score of 0
Been there, done that.
on 2/3/2013 11:01:52 AM with a score of 0
This is my favorite game so far. It's awesome because it is HILARIOUS! w00t!
on 1/29/2013 9:16:29 PM with a score of 0
The melodramatic crazy lady made me feel exactly like I was playing Ace Attorney. I was waiting for the guy to yell out "OBJECTION!" :p
on 11/20/2012 8:13:31 AM with a score of 0
Damn, I got the bad ending. I'll retry
on 11/9/2012 12:47:24 PM with a score of 0
Nice ! ! !
on 6/30/2012 7:06:40 AM with a score of 0
on 6/25/2012 7:24:23 AM with a score of 0
BWAHAHAHAHHAH FEAR MY WRATH CUSTOMER SERVICE!!!
on 5/29/2012 10:48:34 AM with a score of 0
on 12/30/2011 11:16:37 PM with a score of 0
on 10/10/2011 9:31:21 AM with a score of 0
That was a tasteful explanation of how much we all want to rip out customer services' lungs. Reapeatedly. I especeally liked the part where she insanley screams and passes out...
HehHeh...Jerks. Thanks for making that and Please make another, preferably with lots and lots of insane screaming and unbeleavable lying. Thanks,
A Guy Names Stan(ovich)
-- A guy named Stan(ovich) on 9/5/2011 11:21:01 AM with a score of 0
yay, best ending :)
on 6/14/2011 1:41:42 PM with a score of 0
I got all endings :3 I especially liked my dry lips *dries lips*
-- choosesheep on 5/23/2010 10:59:06 PM with a score of 0
on 5/18/2010 9:42:04 PM with a score of 0
Cute. The sad thing is, I think I KNOW that customer service lady.
on 2/26/2010 8:42:55 AM with a score of 0
I loved it, except for the fact that it was a copy of a ZapDramatic drama. Other than that, okay.
-- Jace on 1/29/2010 9:10:19 PM with a score of 0
best ending, vey good game. but very short
-- YES! EPIC WIN! on 11/15/2009 2:13:54 PM with a score of 0
It was such a funny game! However, I got a bad ending. Even so, it was great. Just hope I never meet a customer service lady like that.
on 7/14/2009 1:43:47 AM with a score of 0
Entertaining story! I like the multiple endings. Only problem was that the lady was a BITCH. lol, Nice job.
on 7/8/2008 10:07:05 PM with a score of 0
Yay, best ending. I liked arguing with this woman and I didn't mind the constant screaming, especially when she pounded her fists on a table with charred alarm clock parts. Good job.
on 6/11/2008 1:58:01 PM with a score of 0
Yay, I got the best ending!!
on 6/3/2008 12:03:22 PM with a score of 0
Hilarious, but like Conneth said,there was too much yelling.
on 5/17/2008 11:37:30 AM with a score of 0
neutral ending. woo!
on 4/15/2008 8:39:37 PM with a score of 0
This is hilarious! Play it! The only part I didn't like was the screaming.
on 4/12/2008 9:58:32 PM with a score of 0
That was well written. I agree with Leon, it's a lot like the newgrounds game where you convince the customer service woman to take a refund-- but with a great surprise at the ending!
on 4/12/2008 10:43:41 AM with a score of 0
on 4/10/2008 3:48:27 AM with a score of 0
HAHA! Mystery solved.
on 4/9/2008 3:48:31 PM with a score of 0
There, now I beat it with the best ending. What an insane b****, lol.
on 4/9/2008 1:31:11 PM with a score of 0
Hey, this is pretty good. Even though I got the bad ending, heh heh. You know what this reminds me of, those games on newgrounds where you have to like not get a ticket from a cop and such, by choosing the correct statements.
on 4/9/2008 1:26:03 PM with a score of 0
on 4/8/2008 10:13:47 PM with a score of 0
THAT WAS AWESOME
STARTED LAME BUT WAS SOO COOL!
I totally got her to admit it!
Thanks so much bigfish!
on 4/8/2008 7:09:29 PM with a score of 0
The best newest storygame to date!
-- weru234 on 4/8/2008 6:41:28 PM with a score of 0
Quite entertaining with a decent amount of choices. Good job!
on 4/8/2008 9:30:25 AM with a score of 0
Yay! Ace Attorney Reference! :p Really good, and really fun.
on 4/8/2008 8:44:20 AM with a score of 0
Funny, in a wierd sort of way. I got the best ending.
on 4/7/2008 8:20:16 PM with a score of 0
Ha ha! Why would she do that?
on 4/7/2008 8:12:57 PM with a score of 0
That was fun!
It took me 2 goes to get the good ending, and it was a fun little time killer.
Make more of these!
on 4/7/2008 10:10:16 AM with a score of 0
i got the bad ending. it was worth reading.
on 4/7/2008 12:51:02 AM with a score of 0