Homo Perfectus 4

a Sci-Fi Adventure by SindriV

Commended by BerkaZerka on 9/21/2019 8:53:28 AM

Player Rating7.02/8

"#24 overall, #6 for 2011"
based on 338 ratings since 09/09/2012
played 7,192 times (finished 266)

Story Difficulty4/8

"march in the swamp"

Play Length6/8

"It'll be a while, better grab a Snickers®"

Maturity Level4/8

"need to be accompanied by an adult"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG.

Due to a large number of requests, I have decided to make a fourth Homo Perfectus storygame (despite my claims of Homo Perfectus 3 being the final one).

-If you haven't read the previous ones, this one contains MASSIVE spoilers-

A month has passed since the events of Homo Perfectus 3, and Eve has embraced her new role as Shade, but has detached from society as much as she possibly can. However, more genetically altered beings are being brought into this world as Michael Thorne, a former collegue of Meckard's, tries to take steps towards human perfection.

Player Comments

Homo Perfectus 4 is the best one I've read so far, and I have high hopes for the next four of the Homo Perfectus series. As I continue to read, it only reinforces my opinion that this is the best series on the site. I'm happy that the third Homo Perfectus wasn't the last. I believe that it is amazing that the author considered the opinion of his readers and continued the story, despite stating that Homo Perfectus 3 would be the end of the series. I hope to see another one in the future, but i can imagine that it must be hard to keep coming up with different and original ideas for a new storygame.

Despite the challenges the author faces made by the language barrier, he still manages to portray the writing in a mostly smooth and complex manner, letting the story progress nicely. It could be improved but it is sufficient enough to keep the reader entertained and focused on the events of the story as they progress.

As usual, the author is very accomplished progressing the story at a timely manner with scenes of action and violence. The story evolves as the plot line continues, rising and falling with fights, puzzles, and decision making moments.

I'm sure it is well known by now that descriptive writing and paying attention to detailed information in a story has been a problem with the series, but it has slightly improved since Homo Perfectus. I still think that it should be better, and would greatly improve the story idea and the writing.

Throughout the series, we've been able to connect well with characters’ thoughts, emotions, and actions. Some characters are a bit shoved into the story, others nicely introduced as to not disrupt the mood set by the author.

Spelling and grammar are still big problems, so proofreading is very important and should be done thoroughly.

-- Nyctophilia on 2/24/2017 1:36:58 PM with a score of 125
Although the powers were slightly awkward to control, the story itself was wonderful. The chracters were well developed and instead of skimming dialogue, which is something I tend to do in many stories, I read each individual character conversation and find myself finding a lot of amusement from them. The plot was nice and fun.
Well done, I didn't know how this story would turn out when the characters I've grown fond of in the other Homo Perfectus stories changed so drastically.
-- AndraWu on 1/4/2013 12:36:28 AM with a score of 2044
I'll start with the criticism, to get it out of the way: 'Powers' system was originally streamlined, intuitive and quick to use. The new one is fiddly and time consuming. At no point did I have to use a combination of powers, so the possiblilty of using them in concert is utterly redundant. The sheer faff of using the new system made me want to quit on more than one occasion.

Thankfully, the good outweighs this (Barely); it's yet another excellent Homo Perfectus story, and I really enjoyed playing it.
-- Forge on 3/31/2012 7:49:39 AM with a score of 2040
Although, as other have noted, the power system is a bit hard to use, I thought the plot was well developed. In a few places I was confused as to who was speaking in some of the longer streams of dialog, so you may want to add more dialog tags. Overall great story
-- greenBean on 5/15/2020 10:46:16 PM with a score of 2045
The game itself was great although i liked the older version of using the powers more.

One little Critique is that even as i decided to kill Freakshow the game seemed to consider him alive for a few parts.
-- LJacko on 11/19/2019 8:35:14 AM with a score of 2037
Power system was meh but everything else was a yeh
-- Davefaster on 3/7/2019 8:05:20 PM with a score of 2045
Great game, took me ages to beat Thorne at the end, after half an hour of dying repeatedly, I finally realised i had Freakshow's leash (i'm an idiot).
-- InvictusXL on 3/3/2019 4:18:49 AM with a score of 2044
This story is awesome. Very long and took a lot of time, but it was worth it. I love the characters and I am so happy I didn't have to kill all the experiments.
I do have one complaint however, and that is that I don't like how the abilities are used in this story. I much preferred the old way of using them, but aside from that I absolutely loved it. Thanks for sharing and I look forward to reading the rest.
-- Francesca1986 on 10/5/2018 5:45:39 PM with a score of 2042
great book
-- yoavkedem1 on 6/2/2017 4:48:50 AM with a score of 2038
Awesome story!!!! Eve's powers were a little tough to allocate, redundant pages with new system.100 percent effort though
-- stephenboyd0187 on 4/27/2017 1:49:19 PM with a score of 2034
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