Homo Perfectus 4

a Sci-Fi by SindriV

Commended by BerkaZerka on 9/21/2019 8:53:28 AM

Player Rating6.98/8

"#23 overall, #6 for 2011"
based on 341 ratings since 09/09/2012
played 7,508 times (finished 276)

Story Difficulty4/8

"march in the swamp"

Play Length6/8

"It'll be a while, better grab a Snickers®"

Maturity Level4/8

"need to be accompanied by an adult"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG.

Due to a large number of requests, I have decided to make a fourth Homo Perfectus storygame (despite my claims of Homo Perfectus 3 being the final one).

-If you haven't read the previous ones, this one contains MASSIVE spoilers-

A month has passed since the events of Homo Perfectus 3, and Eve has embraced her new role as Shade, but has detached from society as much as she possibly can. However, more genetically altered beings are being brought into this world as Michael Thorne, a former collegue of Meckard's, tries to take steps towards human perfection.

Player Comments

I noticed a significant increase in quality of writing between this story and the last three. There are still typos, but the language and descriptions are a lot better. There's also a lot more lore and worldbuilding, which was really lacking in the previous games, and I enjoyed the addition of it. My only annoyance is that, while the idea of having this central power control panel page seems really good, it ended up being clunky and not that useful. Avoiding spoilers, this game's plot revolved a lot less about the use of powers than the previous ones, which is neither good nor bad, but the inclusion of this very in-depth mechanic ,without many uses in the game OR a tutorial, seems pointless. Also, dark matter doesn't work like that, but that's not a big deal.

Onto the actual story (spoilers): It was cool to have a game from the perspective of Eve. It was established in either 2 or 3 that she's weaker than Adam, so it nice to see continued discussion of this, and further development of Eve's character. It was also a cool change of pace that there are allies that you can make that help you, and that there are alternatives to fighting. The theme of "the main bad guy tries to achieve perfection through genetic experiments and then realizes that HE'S the perfect one" is very similar to the plot of the LAST GAME. This is somewhat problematic, because even though the execution at the end is different, the overarching plot is almost the exact same as the previous games. I have to say that Thorne's reasoning makes more sense than Meckard's previously, but another issue with this plot line is that, despite the large amount of lore presented up to this point, Thorne's final move felt like it came out of nowhere, and didn't really have a point. Meckard was trying to kill everyone for the entire game, but Thorne just randomly goes from "Make perfect guy with genetic manipulation" to "Just mind control everyone and become that perfect guy" As I mentioned above, the powers are more neglected in this story. They seemed mostly pointless. I had my senses heightened throughout most of the game, but even in situations where I thought something could help (like hearing or vision to monitor the actions of Freakshow near the end), there wasn't a point. This also means that the final fight, where your powers are effectively nullified, doesn't feel as impactful. You have to focus all your energy on brain capacity or you die! Well, good thing that I had randomly maximized that stat earlier and hadn't changed it for 10 pages because it wasn't necessary...

Despite those negatives, the more human interaction between Eve and fellow victims of genetic experimentation was a fun path to choose, and I was glad that I could take a "nonlethal" approach. I'm unsure of whether there is a true ending or even other endings, but it was a nice "and we all live happily ever after" type of conclusion. It's also cool that Eve was very depressed at the beginning of the story, comparing herself to Adam, but as she encountered these other Imperfects, she realized that she's fine as she is, and I'm sure there's a message in there somewhere :)

TL;DR - Very solid continuation, with significantly better writing, good characters, but somewhat lacking mechanics compared to the previous games (it's also a good bit longer than the previous ones). I thoroughly enjoyed it!
-- WizzyCat on 1/27/2021 12:11:25 AM with a score of 2020
Homo Perfectus 4 is the best one I've read so far, and I have high hopes for the next four of the Homo Perfectus series. As I continue to read, it only reinforces my opinion that this is the best series on the site. I'm happy that the third Homo Perfectus wasn't the last. I believe that it is amazing that the author considered the opinion of his readers and continued the story, despite stating that Homo Perfectus 3 would be the end of the series. I hope to see another one in the future, but i can imagine that it must be hard to keep coming up with different and original ideas for a new storygame.

Despite the challenges the author faces made by the language barrier, he still manages to portray the writing in a mostly smooth and complex manner, letting the story progress nicely. It could be improved but it is sufficient enough to keep the reader entertained and focused on the events of the story as they progress.

As usual, the author is very accomplished progressing the story at a timely manner with scenes of action and violence. The story evolves as the plot line continues, rising and falling with fights, puzzles, and decision making moments.

I'm sure it is well known by now that descriptive writing and paying attention to detailed information in a story has been a problem with the series, but it has slightly improved since Homo Perfectus. I still think that it should be better, and would greatly improve the story idea and the writing.

Throughout the series, we've been able to connect well with characters’ thoughts, emotions, and actions. Some characters are a bit shoved into the story, others nicely introduced as to not disrupt the mood set by the author.

Spelling and grammar are still big problems, so proofreading is very important and should be done thoroughly.

7/8
-- Nyctophilia on 2/24/2017 1:36:58 PM with a score of 125
Although the powers were slightly awkward to control, the story itself was wonderful. The chracters were well developed and instead of skimming dialogue, which is something I tend to do in many stories, I read each individual character conversation and find myself finding a lot of amusement from them. The plot was nice and fun.
Well done, I didn't know how this story would turn out when the characters I've grown fond of in the other Homo Perfectus stories changed so drastically.
8/8
-- AndraWu on 1/4/2013 12:36:28 AM with a score of 2044
Most people fail to bring back an ended storyline but this not only brought it back in a non-cruddy way but actually enhanced the storyline. I thought it would be impossible to bring this back without Adam and considering he's dead it would have been completely dumb to bring it back that way. I also like how the controls are more complicated with Eve and she struggled to use her powers more in the beginning so now we can empathize with her.
-- Zombie_Surviver on 4/14/2021 2:45:10 PM with a score of 120
Although, as other have noted, the power system is a bit hard to use, I thought the plot was well developed. In a few places I was confused as to who was speaking in some of the longer streams of dialog, so you may want to add more dialog tags. Overall great story
-- greenBean on 5/15/2020 10:46:16 PM with a score of 2045
The game itself was great although i liked the older version of using the powers more.

One little Critique is that even as i decided to kill Freakshow the game seemed to consider him alive for a few parts.
-- LJacko on 11/19/2019 8:35:14 AM with a score of 2037
Power system was meh but everything else was a yeh
-- Davefaster on 3/7/2019 8:05:20 PM with a score of 2045
Great game, took me ages to beat Thorne at the end, after half an hour of dying repeatedly, I finally realised i had Freakshow's leash (i'm an idiot).
-- InvictusXL on 3/3/2019 4:18:49 AM with a score of 2044
This story is awesome. Very long and took a lot of time, but it was worth it. I love the characters and I am so happy I didn't have to kill all the experiments.
I do have one complaint however, and that is that I don't like how the abilities are used in this story. I much preferred the old way of using them, but aside from that I absolutely loved it. Thanks for sharing and I look forward to reading the rest.
-- Francesca1986 on 10/5/2018 5:45:39 PM with a score of 2042
great book
-- yoavkedem1 on 6/2/2017 4:48:50 AM with a score of 2038
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