Slaying Song

Player Rating5.92/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"
based on 56 ratings since 12/18/2016
played 392 times (finished 62)

Story Difficulty3/8

"trek through the forest"

Play Length4/8

"A well spent lunch break"

Maturity Level4/8

"need to be accompanied by an adult"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG.

It seems you’ve found yourself within
The troublesome affair
Of trekking through the timberland
To slay the dragon there.

They claim it a ferocious fiend;
However will you fare?

My entry for the December 2016 Ballad Contest.

Illustration: Der Kampf mit dem Drachen by Ludwig Richter

Player Comments

I quiet enjoyed it, you kept your rhyme scheme going, a skilled ballad. Though the story wasn't really there, maybe I'm in the wrong but it's still pretty good.
-- Gawain on 1/11/2017 12:24:56 AM with a score of 307
very enjoyable read!
-- Raptor on 1/4/2017 3:48:32 AM with a score of 307
A slaying song indeed!
-- Riversage on 12/27/2016 12:10:58 PM with a score of 307
Beautifully written. Yet I couldn't find a reason for the story. Everything I did felt pointless, and neither choosing to free the dragon nor kill it felt like an obstacle was overcome or that some impact was had on the world at large.

Upon a replay I found the mind control path, and I thought, "Now we're going somewhere interesting! Alright!"

But no, just the same old endings of free or leave and nothing more.

Eh. Again, writing is great, although some stanzas felt like they broke the flow of the piece. I'm just disappointed in the story. Anyone else could have gone besides the hunter and got their ass mind controlled, beat up, or could have left or freed the dragon.

Simply, my actions, and more importantly, I the protagonist, felt utterly pointless.

Fun read tho.

-- Aducan on 12/25/2016 9:23:32 AM with a score of 905
This story was rather short, but it was poetic and beautiful. I've never seen someone do anything like this. I loved it!
-- EmberFowler on 12/20/2016 8:38:42 PM with a score of 307
Very nice story, though I think that the dragon slaying idea wasn't so original. You portrayed it well though, props to you.
-- Lilan on 12/19/2016 6:59:30 PM with a score of 307
Nice poem, I didn't notice any errors. I thoroughly enjoyed it!
-- BigRonn77 on 12/19/2016 12:47:58 PM with a score of 307
-- Mage on 12/19/2016 10:04:51 AM with a score of 407
LOL, I knew it would be dragons.

But VERY nice. Between this and pugpup's entry, the Fantasy section's gotten a couple of real gems out of this contest.

Usually I can't stand it when people mess with the fonts, but you picked a good one, the presentation is great here. And the poem itself flows well, I enjoyed the conversation with the dragon, so all around a good and entertaining read.
-- mizal on 12/18/2016 11:25:12 PM with a score of 408
Very good and original, I loved the rhymes. Good work :)
-- MinnieKing on 12/18/2016 11:05:04 PM with a score of 307
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