Slaying Song

Player Rating5.98/8

"#120 overall, #10 for 2016"
based on 117 ratings since 01/04/2020
played 10 times (finished 0)

Story Difficulty3/8

"trek through the forest"

Play Length2/8

"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"

Maturity Level4/8

"need to be accompanied by an adult"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG.

It seems you’ve found yourself within
The troublesome affair
Of trekking through the timberland
To slay the dragon there.

They claim it a ferocious fiend;
However will you fare?

My entry for the December 2016 Ballad Contest.

Illustration: Der Kampf mit dem Drachen by Ludwig Richter

Player Comments

Wow. Great stuff here. And I’m not a ballad fan. I love the setup and the layout on the title page (this one where we are now), and I appreciate the credit for the drawing in the background, too. In the story the color and the font are excellent and work very well with the story and the setting. I love the pressure on the first page to do the bidding of the poor townsfolk!

I like the choices and how the affect the rest of the story. Some might say they’re false choices, but the way they direct the action of the story is really, really good. And with a story of this type, I can’t imagine the work that would be involved with making that number of unique paths, anyway.

This is a really great short story. The prose is just excellent and it is not at the expense of the story. This could even be a story without the prose, even if it were a short story. If I should ever feel the need to write a ballad, I will certainly return here for inspiration. In fact, anyone who wants to see a good story in ballad form should read this story!
-- Ogre11 on 4/30/2018 8:16:18 PM with a score of 308
Good but short, made me sad when it ended
-- OwO on 11/24/2019 8:50:22 PM with a score of 106
WARNING: Spoilers Ahead

I thought the writing was beautiful, honestly. It takes a lot of skill to craft a well-thought out, meaningful tale in prose that must both rhyme and stick to a certain amount of syllables per line. More than that, for such a short narrative, you managed to create a wide diversity of endings that I thoroughly enjoyed. My favourite had to be the one where you chose to empathize with the dragon and free them, so that they could take care of their young. This ending felt very satisfying: the true 'winning' ending, whereas attempting to kill the dragon resulted simply in disappointment. Overall, I liked how you turned the entire convention of the 'knight slaying the fearsome dragon' into a (potentially) moral dilemma.

I love the background of your story page, as well. It is beautiful and instantly drew me in to the story. Your title makes excellent use of alliteration. For such a short story, you did an excellent job. I've rated this a 7/8 overall.
-- Reader82 on 11/23/2019 6:37:05 PM with a score of 307
Cute. In a very good way
-- H1GH_C0NF3SS0R on 11/5/2019 2:26:03 PM with a score of 307
I thoroughly enjoyed it
-- Kielord on 4/30/2019 11:19:04 PM with a score of 905
I really like it! Everything rhymed, and the pace was great. I'm actually jealous.
-- Anastasia on 2/22/2019 9:22:24 AM with a score of 905
realy good one
-- Davefaster on 2/19/2019 9:11:10 AM with a score of 307
I loved how smooth the poetry was, because I've tried to make stories like this before and I struggled.
-- Algae on 2/12/2019 8:03:33 PM with a score of 307
This was a great story game. Very well written! Excellent job
-- Faervel on 1/29/2019 4:32:42 PM with a score of 307
I'd rate you a meh! On the nomnom scale. I applaud you for writing a very unique short story, I liked your ballad, but I just wish that it was longer... The reason why I rated it so low was just because I'm not a big fan of these types of stories, but kudos to you!
Conversion Chart:
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meh...=2-2.9 stars
nom=3-3.9 stars
-- Cake_Oi on 1/29/2019 2:52:33 PM with a score of 307
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