Under The Bridge
, #71 for
played 569 times (finished 87)
"no possible way to lose"
"Make sure not to blink"
"must be at least this tall to play"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 10. If this were a movie, it would probably be between G and PG.
My entry for the 2016 Riddle Storygame Contest.
Honorable Mention: Riddles & Puzzles 2016
I'm very disappointed with the linearity of this storygame. Many options could have been chosen by the reader, but instead, we had to go a long with what was already chosen for us. By implementing more choices, the length of the storygame would soar, which would boost your ratings quite a bit as well.
The writing is average, nothing special, but it's not that bad either. It didn't pull me in and make me lose track of time like some storygame here, but it had my attention. I quickly lost interest after dying on the second link I clicked.
I hope that you take into consideration my opinion and update this storygame accordingly. I think that it isn't that bad overall, and with some tweaks, could become a great story. Until then, my rating will not change, and nor will my opinion.
on 2/27/2017 10:19:16 PM with a score of 0
It is not easy for me to rate this storygame as there is so little to it, basically you click two choices and the game is over. It is one short scene that the reader is thrown into, with not much rationale behind the story (although I did laugh at one of the endings). I think this segment could be good with some polishing and connection to a broader story, but in the end we only have a very brief scene of what should be a tiny part of a large story, and I’m a little disappointed that there weren’t any riddles/puzzles for the reader to try their hand at.
The dialogue and character reactions were entertaining enough to lift this up to a 3/8.
on 3/5/2016 3:58:23 AM with a score of 0
Haha, in hindsight, the fact that this was in the Fantasy Adventure genre instead of Puzzle/Mystery should have tipped me off, but I was surprised and amused all the same.
Lots of lampshading and harpooning of classic fantasy tropes, witty dialogue, and some of the funniest game over pages I have had the pleasure to read. It was very well written, even if it was very, very short, and I'll save it for a rainy day when I need a chuckle.
That being said, it's was too short for me to give it a higher rating, but what's there is certainly worth the five minutes it takes to read! I'd love to see this game expanded upon, because I'm a sucker for sarcastic and fourth-wall leaning fantasy humor.
on 3/2/2016 4:51:11 PM with a score of 0
Well, the writing in this was quite nice. I did spot a few typos, but not many of them. For such a short story, there was a fair diversity of endings. I loved how I could choose to be a fellow troll, instead of an adventurer on her noble quest. That being said the length was a bit *too* short. None of the pathways lasted longer than two pages, and I was never even presented with the opportunity to solve any riddles.
There were a couple lines that made me laugh out loud. "You knew you should've put more points into charisma," was a fun quip at the convention of assigning points to different attributes in CYOAs. I also loved how you could just try to have the protagonist bribe her way out of solving a simple riddle, leading to the following line of dialogue: "What the hell do you mean you don't take euros? We're in europe." That line made me laugh.
I gave this a 3/8. I'd be happy to give it a four or a five if the length were increased. [The rating isn't a remark on the writing quality; I just want to see a few longer paths].
on 12/21/2019 7:40:39 AM with a score of 0
it would have been a lot better if you made it so that you can actually manipulate the story to increase the length. EX- when you choose the option about being his cousin instead of having a solid story you can change it so that we have more options to make a miniature story of our own. Just Saying.
on 12/7/2018 9:08:41 AM with a score of 0
Would have been better if it was longer.
on 6/8/2018 7:32:14 PM with a score of 0
LIKE THE JOKES MY DUDE
on 2/13/2018 6:57:15 PM with a score of 0
Seriously, is the purpose of this game to advocate "stab the trolls and then move on?"
on 1/7/2018 8:34:27 PM with a score of 0
To short, with not enough choices.
-- Jreesebot on 12/1/2017 2:36:17 PM with a score of 0
short and simple. could be a lot better, has potential, but as it is currently better to read something else.
-- wookiee on a cookie on 11/30/2017 8:52:41 PM with a score of 0
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