Under The Bridge
"Too few ratings to be ranked"
played 59 times (finished 7)
"no possible way to lose"
"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"
"must be at least this tall to play"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 10. If this were a movie, it would probably be between G and PG.
My entry for the 2016 Riddle Storygame Contest.
Honorable Mention: Riddles & Puzzles 2016
I'm very disappointed with the linearity of this storygame. Many options could have been chosen by the reader, but instead, we had to go a long with what was already chosen for us. By implementing more choices, the length of the storygame would soar, which would boost your ratings quite a bit as well.
The writing is average, nothing special, but it's not that bad either. It didn't pull me in and make me lose track of time like some storygame here, but it had my attention. I quickly lost interest after dying on the second link I clicked.
I hope that you take into consideration my opinion and update this storygame accordingly. I think that it isn't that bad overall, and with some tweaks, could become a great story. Until then, my rating will not change, and nor will my opinion.
on 2/27/2017 10:19:16 PM
It is not easy for me to rate this storygame as there is so little to it, basically you click two choices and the game is over. It is one short scene that the reader is thrown into, with not much rationale behind the story (although I did laugh at one of the endings). I think this segment could be good with some polishing and connection to a broader story, but in the end we only have a very brief scene of what should be a tiny part of a large story, and I’m a little disappointed that there weren’t any riddles/puzzles for the reader to try their hand at.
The dialogue and character reactions were entertaining enough to lift this up to a 3/8.
on 3/5/2016 3:58:23 AM
Haha, in hindsight, the fact that this was in the Fantasy Adventure genre instead of Puzzle/Mystery should have tipped me off, but I was surprised and amused all the same.
Lots of lampshading and harpooning of classic fantasy tropes, witty dialogue, and some of the funniest game over pages I have had the pleasure to read. It was very well written, even if it was very, very short, and I'll save it for a rainy day when I need a chuckle.
That being said, it's was too short for me to give it a higher rating, but what's there is certainly worth the five minutes it takes to read! I'd love to see this game expanded upon, because I'm a sucker for sarcastic and fourth-wall leaning fantasy humor.
on 3/2/2016 4:51:11 PM
I loved the humour in this story. It was written very well too. But it was very short and there weren't many choices.
on 2/26/2017 6:46:11 AM
Loved it!!! Funny and surprising! Can we have more?
on 1/17/2017 7:33:38 PM
Way to short
on 10/7/2016 12:53:35 PM
Ha. Nice. Wish it was longer.
on 5/26/2016 11:07:23 AM
That was extremely short. It ended after just two clicks.
-- Kate on 5/22/2016 6:33:39 PM
Cute but very short
-- Stewart on 5/22/2016 12:12:23 PM
on 3/7/2016 5:47:21 PM
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