8/27/2016

7/19/2024 12:21 PM

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1 win / 3 losses

Architect

Yes, stay away from me. I might even offer you a pan brownie.

both were good, and pretty similar honestly. I liked the character of Yvette though, she sounds like the type of woman I would date and get destroyed by therefore ruining me and making me completely unsuitable for dating anyone else. What I'm trying to say is, I vote for Yvette. That is to say, B.

Jesse, what the fuck are you talking about?

Thanks, I was having trouble coming up with an idea for the contest myself.

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Blood for the blood god, skulls for the skull throne

A and B are both decent quality, but A does come across as a more complete, fleshed out idea with some added horror and supernatural elements to it. I didn't fully like how the Britney character was written, but I understand she was meant to be annoying so we don't feel too bad when her life gets taken over by a typewriter, although I do think the author went a bit too deep with the raging cunt feminazi archetype to a point where it doesn't feel serious anymore. As far as B goes, I liked the twist at the end about the true purpose of a love potion, but the characters and the context of the entire thing felt underdeveloped. Maybe knowing more about William and his relationship with Dalia would have clued us in better as to his self-esteem issues and massive insecurity. As it stands, the story is more of a chronology of events and in the end I still don't know anything about these people, this alchemy laboratory, or just what exactly Paul's eyes were opened to in the end. I think this story would have benefited from making full use of the 2000 word limit. C is incomplete, and that's pretty much all I have to say about it. I vote for A.

14k? One word doesn't count as ten just because it's typed by your fat greasy fingers. Fatass.

All the gay insults that have been thrown around aside, I’m glad to see Cel standing up for his brothers and sisters. Turkey and Palestine stand together.