I'd like to pull corgi up from the second level of the pit.

Thanks for the tip! 

Thank you so much for all the detailed advice and feedback! I love getting feedback because it helps me improve as a writer. And I agree, it does seem like less of a standalone story and more of an excerpt from a larger work. I will definitely keep this in mind for the future, along with all the other points you made.

I wrote this flash fiction story a while ago, which I forgot about until now, so I thought I'd share it with you guys. It's not my best work, but it was fun to write nonetheless.

The man pushed himself up by his elbows, leaning against the wall to keep his body from giving out. 

“You fucking scumbag,” I snarled at him.

“It’s not my fault you didn’t teach your daughter self defense.” He released an airy chuckle as blood dribbled down his upper lip and into his mouth, staining his bottom teeth.

I grabbed his throat and forced him to his feet. “And whose fault is it that your pathetic offspring can’t keep his dick to himself?”

He looked straight into my eyes and smiled lazily. “Go ahead, then,” he challenged, but I knew better.

“You’d love that, wouldn’t you?” Dropping him to the ground, I watched in disgust as he began to lose consciousness.

“Maybe…” he trailed off.

“This is the last peaceful rest you’ll get in a while,” I said, turning around and heading towards the exit. “Enjoy it while it lasts.”

Ogre11?

I'll take 16.

I'm gonna guess Will11.

I'm interested :)

Hey Naz, I just came on here to say a few things.

First of all, I'm so sorry for your loss. I can't imagine how hard that must be to deal with, especially as a kid. I want you to know that my dms are open if you need someone to vent to or just want a friend. Secondly, I know some of the people on this site can be a bit harsh with their words, so I just want to tell you that I don't blame you for having an episode. It's understandable that someone who is going through so much at such a young age would not be able to regulate their emotions properly. But I also see how telling people on here about your trauma might put them in an awkward position or make them uncomfortable. Just keep that in mind for the future, since not everyone is equipped to handle such heavy topics. Lastly, I hope you're doing okay, and that you're not struggling too much with external problems as well as internal. I'm not sure what your current housing situation is, but if you need help finding resources, let me know. 

Also, if you want to talk about things like writing or other hobbies as a way to distract yourself from the pain, feel free to reach out.

- Ally

I'm looking for something to read right now, so this is perfect.