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(I'm taking a break from the second storygame I'm creating)

You sit in the soft sand near the peaceful water. You're enjoying yourself just sitting there. Then a person touches you and BANGS you in the head with a metal bat he got outta nowhere.

"Hey!", you say. Visibly hurt in the head.

"Get off there!", the person says.

Then the person gets frustrated and drags you out of the beach with average hands. The end.

(This is a silly story and is just... Bad?)

Yes, it is bad. 

Thank you for hating my story :)

What makes them average hands? Also unsure if BANG is the noise a metal bad would make if it clocked you in the back of the head. Maybe more of a thwonk.

Did an AI write this? Cause here's what it reminds me of.

WHAT IS THAT-

That was really short.

Thank you.