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This game is going to be a sort of... RPG.  You start off as a first time runner at Maddox High (not associated with any real schools) on the track team.  You must progress your way through the season without dying or killing yourself, and your goal is to become a first place racer.  Sounds easy?  It's not going to be.

Obviously the game is still in development, and will take tons of scripting, so I will probably need a lot of help!

Feel free to toss around ideas and thoughts!

Steroids totally should be an option.

Definitely....  It wouldn't be high school track without them.

I thought we already had Endmaster cover a story about steroids. lol

One page about steroids and sheep raping.

It was a cow and that was the musician path.

The path that had steroids involved necrophilia and cop killing.

How complex? Win a certain number of races to make it from JV to Varsity? Then place high enough to win regionals and then state?

Cheating and shortcuts during the race?

The races are mostly going to be based on your stats rather than choices.  And there will be a JV and varsity team, although not sure how to implement it yet.  There will definitely going to be cheating during the races, but not too sure about shortcuts.

Barring the steroids, I'm wondering what other death endings you're planning on. Sounds like this is a pretty dangerous high school if death is around every corner.

*Looks back at your "Very Special Choose Your Own Story" game*

Yeah.. Well, at least it isn't from something as absurd going on a roid rage, though that'd still be entertaining ^^

There are plenty of ways to die in a perfectly normal high school these days! Boringfirelion, I suggest these death pages!

Getting a heart attack trying to beat the Asian kid who's better at everything, even though you're level 1.

Pissing off the jocks and drowning in a swirly.

Getting drunk at an older kid's party and then raped to death because it turned out to be a Gay Fraternity party all along.

Getting drunk at an older kid's party and then accidentally sleeping with a totally psycho bitch who will control your life for the rest of the game and/or kill you.

Getting drunk and accidentally sleeping with a Gay dude in drag and then live with shame for the rest of the game and/or get lynched by the KKK.

Getting drunk and accidentally sleeping with an overmuscular/whale-like girl who breaks every bone in your body in the process.

Running too far and falling off Dead-Man's drift.

Running so much that you die of medical complications from incredibly low fat content/heart stress/red-tank-top-wearing douchebaggery

?Being in a car with an upperclassman during freshman year. (Thus crashing and becoming the dead freshman that they always dedicate the yearbook to.)

Getting stoned with the future psychopath students.

Getting stoned with an actual psychopath.

Failing to protect yourself since you didn't take kung-fu lessons from the local hobo.

Taking "hands on" kung-fu lessons from the local hobo.

Getting too cozy with the school shooter before he goes on a rampage, forcing you to join him and get shot by cops or die.

Not getting cozy with the school shooter before he goes on a rampage, giving him no reason NOT to shoot you.

Joining the swim team and getting raped by the gay kids in the shower.

Joining te swim team and getting killed by an emotionally unstable track coach who feels betrayed.

Joining the Ku Klux Klan and getting lynched by angry black people.

Joining the Neo Nazis and getting lynched by the JDL.

Joining the Neo Soviets and getting lynched by the Neo Nazis.

Running into a door while training.

Getting attacked by a chainsaw-wielding-teenager-killer.

Joining the wrestling team and getting choked out.

Become so emotionally invested in getting into a cheerleader's pants that you kill yourself when you fail.

Getting exposed in a scandal with one of the cheerleaders and killing yourself afterward.

Getting hit in the head with a chain for trying to outrun a biker gang.

Getting murdered in the streets by a hillbilly for wearing 'faggoty' running shorts.

Getting disemboweled in a meat grinder in the school cafeteria.

Wearing blackface makeup and walking past an actual black guy.

Wearing blackface makeup and walking past a cop.

Trying to sneak into a synagogue on a dare and walking through the Goyim Detector.

Dressing in drag on a dare and getting raped to death at a party.

Taking a shit and getting murdered by a guy who's waited 4 hours for you to get done already.

Well I'm just wondering what direction Boring was going with, because a track team/winning a race sounds like a pretty normal theme and at the surface I don't see a lot of endings involving the protagonist dying. Losing or not qualifying maybe, but no death unless we go the abusing steroids/drugs angle.

Of course Boring made a point of saying trying to get through the season without dying or killing yourself which said to me that this was going to be a story where there is a lot of death going on.

So…

1. Jealous team mate poisons your water bottle.
2. Bus taking you to the track crashes.
3. You accidentally slip on the soap and crack your skull open on the shower floor tiling
4. You develop a homosexual relationship with another teammate and then get killed by the local rednecks.
5. The coach likes young boys and lures you to his house and when you try to escape he tortures you to death.
6. You suddenly spontaneously combust for no apparent reason.
7. You're using a running machine which malfunctions and you go flying backwards out a three story window and onto a spiked fence.
8. You're shot by the school outcast who targets all the athletes.
9. You get popular with the girls and you have sex with one that has a horrible STD that melts your crotch.
10. You end up running so fast that you go back in time and get eaten by a dinosaur

EDIT: Looks like Sentinel beat me to it.

There's a helluva lot more deaths if you count extracurricular activities and groups.

I was focusing on the track stuff and just giving a few examples.

"10. You end up running so fast that you go back in time and get eaten by a dinosaur"

10/10 Would run again.

There's not going to be a lot of death necessarily, but there are a few things that will cause it.  One thing you should keep your eye one is your happiness, which will change depending on what happens.  Another is your health.  There will be some random events that either make you sick, injure you, and sometimes, if you push yourself too hard, you may injure yourself.  These may not kill you directly, but will lead you to become increasingly depressed.

Oh, come on! You just got, like, 90 spectacular high school deaths here alone! I mean, if there's 70-90 ways to die, no one could accuse you of being linear!

Reminds me of one of the older CYOA books (About a bike race I believe) and I think early on you had the option to watch TV while taking a bath (Great idea!) and the TV fell into the bathtub, electrocuting you.

Really?... Of all the things we've been suggesting, this actually seems like the best idea!

Or if you are doing the whole "teenage angst route"... 

You try to fap and tear your own cock off by mistake.

This character has no need to fap. Half the suggested deaths have him having a lot of sex that he doesn't want to have.

But, I like where you're going with this whole "Death during consensual" thing... Let's see....

Join the furries and get caught in an orgy by Farmer Joe.

Join the satanists and get caught in an orgy by Van Helsing Jr.

Join the Nerd clique and get caught sexing one of your female cosplaying friends by that girl's boyfriend/father/both.

Have an affair with the top Jock's girlfriend.

Have an affair with the Principal's wife.

Have an affair with one of the class pets. (Who is secretly a shapeshifter who sold her soul to a teacher or something. No need to get too furry on this one...)

Have an affair with the Principal.

Have an affair with a closetted, depraved sadomasochist.

Take too many aphrodisiacs/sexual performance enhancers at once.

Get head encompassed by mistake during oral. 

Get dick ripped off during regular sex with an overly tight genitalia. 

Try to fuck your the porno on your TV screen and getting a shard of glass in your dick. 

Do the "Iron Unicorn". 

Hire Polynesian hookers without wearing protection; dies of a mutant squid in ballsack that feeds off the soul.

At this point it sounds like "Run of the Lifetime" isn't so much about joining a track team but instead about hauling ass out of some hellish death filled dimension.

Made by some freaky pansexual rape god. 

So, basically, Jihelu should Co-Author this CYOA?

Actually, I want him as a co-author for Farmer Joe. 

Actually, you probably don't, since Jihelu is a super-furry. The 'right handed' kind, or so he's implied before his untimely death here. And unless he's actually sure you're just writing a satire against fursecution, he's either going to do it to be ironic or prove to his ultra-conservative parents (If they are ultra-conservative) that he's okay after all, if he accepts... Which he kind of can't, because JJJ sent him to hell in a handbasket.

What are you talking about? These are all perfectly normal deaths!

Get trapped in a corner when running from the Deep Ones.

Try to play dead when running from the Roc.

Accidentally let The Prophecy come to fruition.

Run out of extra lives.

Get a pencil stuck in your eye whilst writing your diary and accidentally brain yourself.

Fail to escape the forest of bones.

Join the swim team and spend your first day in the River of Teeth on a dare.

Go mad from the revelation.

Go into the abandoned church basement.

Piss off the Eye Collector.

Walk into the darkness.

Enter the Gods' Mouth.

Get mauled by Bloodhounds in the Dubstep woods.

Get mauled by flying sharks.

Get mauled by flying bears.

Get mauled by the sub-terraneans.

Get mauled by inbred mutant rednecks.

Get quickscoped by the ghost of JFK.

Be torn apart by indescribable things.

Be attacked by Faceless Monster cliche #19.

Wear blackface makeup and walk past the ghost of Malcolm X.

Worship the kudzu.

Stand against the Gurkhas as WWIII begins.

Well... thanks for all the death ideas.  I'll be sure to use one.  Maybe.

Take your time, turns out there's only about 89 deaths to choose from, not the 90 that I originally estimated.
So far, the best ones seem to be: (In no particular order.)

Try to fuck your the porno on your TV screen and getting a shard of glass in your dick. 

Get electrocuted when watching TV in the bathtub.

Wearing blackface makeup and walking past an actual black guy.

End up running so fast that you go back in time and get eaten by a dinosaur.

The coach likes young boys and lures you to his house and when you try to escape he tortures you to death.

Getting drunk and accidentally sleeping with a Gay dude in drag and then live with shame for the rest of the game and/or get lynched by the KKK.

Oh no...

 

Wait.  What if the main character is a young girl?  Then the coach won't lure her into his house.

Pedos go both ways, I think.

The coach is always willing to rape and torture the protagonist regardless of gender.

Everyone is potentially bi. It will be like a Bioware game that way except with more meaningful choices.

I still expect your blue ass in bed with me if this is going to work. 

Bitch and her psychic STDs....

Hey, that's another idea!  "Die from brain shutdown after psychic alien sex."

Here's some suggestions:

Run so fast your legs melt.

Join the football team (If there will be one) and get whipped with a towel wrapped with barbed wire in the locker room.

Kill yourself because you got to fat.

Starve to death because you went on to hardcore of a diet.

That's all the ones I could come up with right now.

Okay... this is going to be a game of death!  Just scratch my original idea and just do all this!  I'm joking, gosh!

Oh, and get shot in the face when getting a blowjob from a cop dressed as a whore.

Or get shot in the face by a pimp when getting a blowjob from a whore dressed as a cop!

@ #3

*Die of a heart explosion for continuing to run track despite your morbid obesity. FTFY

Kill yourself because you got to skinny. 

There's one for you, Sent.

I don't have to kill myself. Anorexia already did it for me!... Inside... *sobs in corner*

Yeah... T'loak's a slut. 

I've got a WIP title page in place, and made some considerable progress with scripting!