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Graveyard of Unfinished Stories

one month ago

I was going through all of the story games I have created, wrote a few pages of, then forgotten, and found some that may be of some worth. There are only three, and one was the last story I published a couple of years back. I would like to know, if there is anyone so kind as to help me, which of these has the most potential. I'm in the process of story boarding a different story game, and I'm trying to determine which parts of my writing are strengths/weaknesses. That, and I would like to know which of these story ideas genuinely seemed the most compelling or interesting. The first two are incomplete in the extreme. Both of them only have a few pages, but typically the first few pages are enough to determine whether it would be an interesting read or not. 
 

So essentially my main question for these first two is, would you keep reading if there were more, and why? 


https://chooseyourstory.com/story/spellbondhttps://chooseyourstory.com/story/spellbond

https://chooseyourstory.com/story/the-kingdom-of-cystia

This last one is mainly for comparison purposes. I already have several good reviews to tell me its many flaws, but I still would like to know if the first few pages are more or less engaging than the other two stories. 
 

https://chooseyourstory.com/story/pride's-hunt

 

Anyhow, I would be really appreciative of any feedback at all. I would be especially appreciative of anyone that could give me direct feedback on which of these has my best writing, first off, and then a follow up on how good that writing is period. 

Cordially, 

A Return Refugee who wants to improve

Graveyard of Unfinished Stories

one month ago
As reluctant as I am to see the world denied such meme material, if you're looking at old stories to edit, may I suggest finally doing something with the opening of A Chosen Hero?

Graveyard of Unfinished Stories

one month ago

Yeah, that's a good idea. I honestly completely forgot about that, so I'll get that taken care of. Don't ratings reset if I take it down?
 

I'm mostly looking at appraising the stories to see what their worth is, but maybe I'll edit/finish them if people like them enough. 

Graveyard of Unfinished Stories

one month ago
Nope, the only thing lost is any saves anyone might have had.

Also, I don't believe any of those stories you linked are currently in Sneak Peek.

Graveyard of Unfinished Stories

one month ago

Noted.
 

Oh, so you can't view them?

Graveyard of Unfinished Stories

one month ago

More like we can view them due to being Gods, but mere mortals can't.

Graveyard of Unfinished Stories

one month ago

Gotcha. Changed them

Graveyard of Unfinished Stories

one month ago

The first one seems very promising to me. Maybe you should see if there's more potential to be explored with it to make it something that's a finished work. 

Graveyard of Unfinished Stories

one month ago
First one could turn into something decent, writing would need tightening as feels a bit like it's done by a bright young teen trying to write a fantasy story (i.e: bit contrived/lacking own style), but that's understandable seeing as, iirc, you were in your teens a few years ago. Good luck!