You have dedicated years of your life working to prove the existence of a hidden pharaoh - someone who has pulled the strings of Ancient Egypt from the shadows, Kannok. Will you delve into the tomb and be successful, or will this just be another piece of history lost to time?

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This is my submissions for End Master’s Prompt Contest 3. Any and all feedback is welcomed and appreciated.

The gods of the realm fall silent as the Lahrian Kingdom spreads the following of The True God across the land. The Inquisitor's army has been sieging the city of Aurella for three weeks now. Your army grows restless at it seeks to purge the heretics inside it's gates. Will you destroy the city in the name of your god through slaughter, or will you find another way? 

Damn that's a good twist right there. 

I'm glad Alien volunteered for that. I think I understand his point on...how natural and free flowing it is to...sort of phrase each post like a stream of consciousness...I'm kind of surprised that...it took this long to catch...on

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Your point of Story B "not making you care about it on a personal level" is insane. That war ACTUALLY happened. Those people ACTUALLY DIED. Now I'm not saying Story B is a piece of nonfiction but its absolutely based on real world events (which may have went down like that). Holy fuck dude. We literally went over there and fucking destroyed a country. We kicked in doors. We bombed kids. We mass murdered people in the initial invasion. Men, women, children getting absolutely rekt'd. 

I'm not mad that you voted A. I don't care about that - its 2 stories, but to say that the story does not stand on its own because it didn't make you care about if the war happened or not is just being blatantly ignorant to world events. 

Just going to cut to the chase: Story B.

I liked both of them for different reasons.

Story A: Love the cyberpunk setting. Whole thing was a great read. Had funny moments and reminded me heavy of The Heist from Cyberpunk 2077. 

Story B: Holy shit dude. That was great read. The emotion conveyed through that story was absolutely amazing. It really stirred some emotions up in me and for that its got my vote.

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