A comprehensive quiz + bonus fan faction about the the underrated cult classic show "Kelly Unicornstrider and Friends" (1982-1985). Questions range from really easy to really difficult.

I think putting this on "publish" makes it so only we can see this. It's just for us, sweetie. I made it to celebrate our anniversary and remember some special intimate moments together over the years in an interesting way as a present for you.

I hope you love it, Natalie, as much as I love you!

(Of course if there's any admin looking at this, or if I messed up, don't read this, because it's got private things in it.)

This is my required report to the full faculty in accordance with the rules noted in the Faculty Handbook (version 15.1, as of October 2017)

"Personally I can only read 16 words in one go before words stop working," wrote Mizal.

This game has sixteen words per path.  Not counting "The End."  So you can play quickly.

When reviewing, please use precisely sixteen words.   That should be plenty for your suggestions and observations.

Note this challenge connected with this game:  Write the Last Page!

On the contrary, you should.  Write a bunch of stuff even if it isn't good.  The first million words is just for practice. 

In the absence of a story and characters, this is eyeball-repelling.  Nobody cares about the deep back story in the absence of the narrative, even with Proper Names that are Capitalized.  It's a sad but important truth of writing.  Give us a reason to care; that caring is not a given.

Also, I recommend paragraphing--use white space so that your readers are not faced with a big block of text.

I wouldn't say it's common, but you see it.  And don't worry so much about it being good.  Your first few storygames are very likely not to be good, and you just have to weather that storm and get better and better.  Good luck.  Enjoy the process.

Read it out loud.  It helps so much.

Honestly, that's on us.  We need to be meaner, to provoke that most productive of spite-writing states.

I liked it.  I thought the first half of it held together better than the second half.  Maybe that's the point (I don't think so).  But it was a cool read nevertheless.  As a footnotey genius-mess, I thought Infinite Jest was more fun to read, but obviously there's less metatextual shenanigans.

I always feel, with Blake's mysticism, that I'm coming into Act IV of a play with no program, and also it's part two of a three part play.  Or like I'm starting a fantasy novel and the author has an elaborate history all worked out complete with his own language, and he wants to throw it all at me on page one to world build.  But as a general concept, I don't object to mysticism, even though I am very ignorant of it.  I have a lot to learn on the subject.  Maybe I'll return to Milton at some point.

That I disagree with, actually.  I think a lot of Blake's lyric poetry is wonderful.  I often teach his "London" and his "Sick Rose" and lots of other Songs of Innocence and Experience, and I like the Marriage of Heaven and Hell.  But his mystical works I find very hard to read. 

And I double posted the same thing.  Oh, well. 

I'd like to see what you do with a completed storygame--that will get you so much feedback from everyone here, because everyone is so eager to give a lot of thoughtful, comprehensive feedback on the new games here.  I would start there, even if it ends up not being very good.  The first million words are for practice, anyway.