A Dragon's Journey

Come on people this story wasn't too bad and what's the problem with warrior cat stories and having some grammar mistakes, to me the story was pretty good as long as dragonmon finishes his quiz I'm sure that it will be great!

I'm sorry for the wasted time. I will finish it, but as for the rogue bit I deleted that option. And yes, I got my inspiration for this story from warrior cats.

Okay, what did I just read?

I think it would be better if you portrayed the dragons more like majestic, misunderstood beasts.

A good example of what I'm talking about is found in the flash game How To Raise a Dragon, where the dragon is still, inherently, an animal. A very intelligent animal, but an animal nonetheless, and in its elder years is either hated for acting upon its bestial nature or revered for playing god.

Overall, I think you could really turn this idea into something special! :D

-Charaxes

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Okay, what do we have here? The description and the reg date promises this experience will be fuckin MAGIC.

Okay, hrm...some punctuation errors, which definitely shouldn't exist in such a short game. Tense switching, POV switching...and ugh, these dragons.

'It was a bright, sunny morning. The birds were singing, the crickets were chirping and the other dragons, having overheard that a little male dragon would hatch today, were sitting anxiously in their caves with baskets of gold in their mouths.'

This would be more believable as a story about fairies or unicorns or something.

Waitaminute. Hunter, warrior, medicine dragon, rogue? this is reskinned Warrior Cats, ffs. Even the dragon names... Also the Rogue path loops endlessly. Congrats on not spelling it like the makeup, though.

'Time for your training! Who's your teacher again?' Why is the story asking me this? And it lets me choose any of the three? For that matter, why does the story ask me my own name a moment later? That was chosen in the beginning. (I half expect to see 'for toms' and 'for shedragons' next to these links, getting so much deja vu here...)

And just like that, choosing a partner...annnnd 'Thank you for reading this short story. I will be constantly updating it and it should be done by christmas. Hope you enjoyed!' LOL, thanks but no thanks.

What kind of sissy dragon is named "Moss" ?

The story itself was actually pretty decent. I enjoyed it; the writing was not too shabby. However, the game is unfinished. So what might have been a 4/8 rating is going down to 2/8. Don't publish unfinished stuff, PLEASE.

If you want people to read an unfinished storygame, you can always just keep it unpublished and provide the link. Don't publish something unless it's absolutely finished.

This wasn't finished, it wasn't... it just wasn't a story.