After the Ministry Interview

You're pumping these stories out at such a rate that the quality is going downhill faster than a dangerously steep ski slope. I'm not sure if you're reading reader's feedback but you really should, the stories show an ok amount of creativity but the grammar and spelling mistakes aren't something we should find in any written work :)

Well, this definitely isn't a game or an adventure. There are literally no choices here, just one link per page and just a handful of pages at that. You really aren't putting any sincere effort into these things, are you?

I think that somewhere along the line you lost patience, or you were just impatient at the beginning.

To be honest, your other published storygames, though not of the highest quality, were all of better quality than this particular "work" (many people would disagree with calling your attempt the quoted word, but I digress). This story lacks any clear organization, is devoid of choices, and ultimately an unnecessary creation, especially when you could have combined this section with one of your other storygames.

A 1/8 for your troubles, of which there were probably none due to lack of effort.

No choices and the story was short and just a waist of time.

This is not a storygame. There are no choices. It is short. This along with your other storygames would have been bettwe as a single storygame, not four seperate ones.

What are you trying to do, game the system by publishing for a few measly points!? This was more like jotting down a few notes, it wasn't even story. Since it didn't have any game elements, it should not have been published at all!

absolute shit

I'd rather read WC instead of this!

There weren't any choices...

Just stop.