Backwoods

This was an interesting plotline. I will say that I think it would have benefitted from a proofreader, as there were a few errors that could have been caught before being published.

It was good to see that Kent and the player character had a (semi, at least) legitimate reason for being out in the forest, even if driving to a bar perhaps wasn't the best reason. I did wonder how they planned to get home afterwards, though, since I assume they would be too drunk to drive safely.

I liked the fact that the player character took the beer from Kent, but I was a little disappointed that the only choices after that were to either give the beer to Kent, or to drink it myself. Still, at least there was the opportunity to avoid drinking and driving!

I did think about refusing to follow Angel to the sanctuary and taking my chances in the forest, with whatever might be there, but I decided not to do what would probably be the most sensible thing. I found it interesting that Byron's speech later indicates that the player character is like the deer that just followed Angel to the Sanctuary. It gives off very 'I'm only doing this because you chose it' vibes, which I always find quite interesting.

I did find the whole hand in the fridge to be extremely creepy, and it was good to have the opportunity to explore and look for more evidence before leaving. Unfortunately, the path I took did end up getting Kent killed, so perhaps if I'd chosen a different path, both of us would have been able to get out without being caught.

I think there were parts of this storygame that could have been expanded upon and, as I mentioned, it could have done with a proofreader prior to being published. But the concept was an interesting one, and I'd be interested in exploring more and seeing if I could end up with a different fate in the future.

A good horror game, old but a classic. A few spelling and grammatical errors, but not terrible.

good story lol

boring

I didn't obey.

Very amazing! I love it. Try to make it out alive... There is cannibalism and gore. Amazing!!!

This... how do I say it, was okay for me. I felt that the story was eh, it might be better had there been more describing and action.
The major thing is, the story needs meat, and bones. You have the bones, the structure, what it is about, however the flesh is missing. This is what sets a good story apart from a "meh" one. A good story would have vivid, descriptive text(if applicable), and this is pretty important for horror stories. From what I've read, good horror can creep you out from either 1.Lack of information, or 2. Details details details.
I think you have the idea here, just need to really flesh it out.
You have the balloon, but blow it up.
You have the ink, now paint the picture.
I can go on and on...
Good luck!

This was pretty good. Probably the best horror story game I've played so far.

'Your in the wrong place, at the wrong time.' I saw that and I expected a page full of grammatical errors. It's and its, your and you're, there, their, and they're-PLEASE take the time to learn how to differentiate between the homonyms and I guarantee you'll be much better.

Also, as others have mentioned, you make the reader make choices that they don't want to. That isn't a storygame. That's just a story.

Good potential, but needs work. 2/8.

SPOILER ALERT!!!

Is the best ending getting home, then "Obey"?