Dear Santa

A modern storygame by Leafmaggio

Player Rating2.74/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"

Based on 62 ratings since
Played times (finished )

Story Difficulty5/8

"Run through the jungle"

Play Length2/8

"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"

Maturity Level5/8

"Aren't you a little too old to be trick or treating"

Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG-13.

Player Comments

Do:
Delete the introduction (that was random);
Capitalize words correctly;
Break down large paragraphs;
Make some conflict;
Make choices logical (unless you had wanted to emphasis the humor of it);
Make it more humorous (because I didn't find it very funny)).

Good:
Background information;
Writing skills (very nice writing ability).

— Crescentstar on 12/11/2016 11:40:34 AM with a score of 0

What... what was day ending, do? Larb

— Tarbo134 on 7/13/2017 1:15:49 AM with a score of 0

Sorry. Not much to the story. It didn't grab my attention and take me away. When I read something, the best way to get a good rating from me is to take me to " Readerland", make me smile/laugh/cry. I was stuck in reality. Thank you for trying. :)

— Quorrah on 1/23/2017 2:40:49 PM with a score of 0

Yes! Loved it

— AlexTERRARIAN on 10/25/2016 3:40:01 PM with a score of 0

It could have been longer

— corgi213 on 11/7/2015 7:38:40 AM with a score of 0

Eh, this was wierd

— Warriorcatadventures on 9/8/2015 1:52:41 PM with a score of 0

Eh..Short, but okay. There's not enough ways to go yet.

— GiraffeDino on 7/11/2015 7:18:21 PM with a score of 0

To quote Chris and TheDickReviewer, at least it ain't warrior cats.

— PortalSpartan on 4/28/2015 7:22:03 PM with a score of 0

Choose your own BORDOM! I give this game a 1/8. Uhhh..... it's alright. I guess. I won Christmas, so it can't be THAT bad. It's pretty much impossible to loose.

Dear Santa

Player Rating2.74/8

Story Difficulty5/8

Play Length2/8

Maturity Level5/8

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