Is it Shameful?

No comment, all I can say is that this idea is well executed, but I don't know what audience would play this.

The story was, as all the other commenters said, short and sweet.

Alice was surprisingly well fleshed out for such a short story, she really does have a distinct and enjoyable to read personality.

A lot of the sentences were rather rough. One example is "She doesn't care you were being left out." \
It would flow better if it was "She doesn't care you're being left out." or "She didn't care you were being left out."

I would have preferred if the surroundings were described a bit more in the beginning, it would have helped set the tone of the story.


All in all, 4/8. Quite enjoyable, though rather short.

This was sweet. The English was a bit chunky but that's fine. I was confused by the lack of detail or any kind of explanation on the first page. it's just kind of jumbled and we're left to our first choice. Still, a short and sweet game.

6/10 +1 for sweetness

I adore this so much, it was very cute. :D

I think I understand what was being tried here but it lacks realism and explanation. I like the idea of moments and words but a bit more physical description would also be helpful too.

I just met you, and this is crazy...so c'mere and let me kiss you because you're the love of my life!

I'm an APH fan myself, but even I had a hard time understanding all of this ("older sister"?). The writing is nice, but even when I play as myself in the game, I'd still like to know more about me (in the game).

your target audience is really small. next time write to a bigger crowd.

Unless we know what the hell what realm you're on, and after plenty of hours with the Hetalia material slammed into our minds...

Maybe a reader MIGHT understand what this is.

It's ok...