Pon-Pon & Zen-Zen

... What the actual fuck just happened?

Aww

"Give her my eyes... she needs them more than I do.
Zen-Zen gives Pon-Pon his precious blue eyes. They are always together, the way Zen-Zen holds her in his arms and the way she smiles only for him... they say something without the need for any words...
I love you"

Excuse me? Is this a worse ending than being hit by the monster with one swing and die? ;)

This was actually pretty decent so long as you stayed on the "right" path. Otherwise, you were confronted with some badly-written pages and the game ends very quickly. Very cute and probably doesn't deserve the rating it has.

So short

I gave it 4/8 I liked it until the end when the writer demeans the reader. It was well written til that part spoiled it for me. Short and sweet

It was too short.

cute but not very long

Having traded arms and eyes with my loved one I now feel we are both ready to have our mutant children :) To be honest it was cute and a nice story but bits of it like the monster could do with more info. It is cute though and it is a nice story, for some reason I think pictures would go particularly well with this.

You totally had my attention... and then I hit the play button. xD

In all seriousness, no, it wasn't too awful, but you should check out some of the higher ranking story games and try to get a feel for writing with more... finesse.