School simulator demo

Well, this was absolutely fucking terrifying.

Oh Jesus fucking Christ.
That's all I have to say. ^-^
1/8

This game is bad and you should feel bad!

The game is too short, it has linkless pages and it's demo! Another to be burned!

*burns in holy fire*

It's not very funny, there's too many spaces in between links, and it's just...poor, and it's a demo, and it isn't even that long.

No.
Firstly, NEVER publish demos.
1/8. Wow, the game's overall rating is 1/8. This'll be deleted soon.

Its not the best ,and its not the worst.Just keep making story games.The more you practice the better you do!:)

No details. Few sentences.


1/10

There are several reasons why this story is getting 1s.

Firstly, each page is nothing more than two sentences with a ridiculous amount of space between them.

Secondly, your poor use (or, in some cases, downright lack) of punctuation detracts from the readability of your story.

Thirdly, as much as people are accustomed to using the 'go back' button, you can't just have a page with no links. It disrupts the immersion and is flat out annoying.

Lastly, the game ends too abruptly and unexpectedly. As poorly written as it was, I was still holding out a tiny bit of hope that your game would be a little better paced.

Now, that is all I have to say about your game. In regards to your comment, though, I have a few more words. Taking pride in your work is perfectly healthy, but you still need to be honest in rating your story. Do you really think that this game deserves an 8? If not, then don't give it an 8. If so, then give it that score, but be prepared to defend your actions, to tell us exactly why your game deserves a rating that many of the greatest games on this site aren't able to achieve or, at least, maintain for very long.

You rated this an 8/8 but everyone else is giving it a 1/8. What does this tell you?

Incidentally this will probably get taken down because a story-game with unfinished links is below the minimum quality standard on this site.

I give you a 1/8 for rating your own story an 8.