A stranger's love

Player Rating2.66/8

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based on 282 ratings since
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Story Difficulty2/8

"walk in the park"

Play Length2/8

"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"

Maturity Level2/8

"choking hazard for children under 4"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 6. To compare to the movie rating system, this would be G.

You are taking a break from work for 2 weeks and decide to go to South Korea. Everything hasn't been going well lately and you are starting to regret taking this trip. . Just then you meet a handsome stranger and things start to get better.

Player Comments

One thing I have to say as an avid reader and writer, you need to have a better flow. The character goes from one place to the other too quickly, and meeting the stranger on the first day, instantly forming a connection makes the story go by too fast. Slow it down a bit for your readers to enjoy, make sure the story stays interesting and have the relationship develop naturally.

Formally Speaking,
~Kite :0)
-- CursedKite on 12/9/2015 2:44:02 PM with a score of 0
There are parts of the story that are written reasonably well, but it lacks serious amounts of detail. based of off that, I think it was possible to add vivid details to the story, the first page proves that.

I noticed a poor amount of detail put into certain parts of the story that would normally be considered important. In order to make progress I think there would have to be a good amount of information to contemplate. Unfortunately, there was not much to act on.

When it came to the actual date there was a lot left out. There was no explanation of the date itself, where the characters went, how well the date had gone and what happened after the date. I also do not understand why there are large amounts of time skipped over. I believe there was two years skipped over before the characters meet again. I would of enjoyed a much longer story that would have given a romantic climax.

The ending of the story was not very explanatory. When I would choose to continue dating it would not give much detail aiding my digestion of the situations encountered.
-- EvilSmile on 6/26/2015 6:30:33 PM with a score of 0
This was written well and the choices did seem to have an impact on the story which I like. However, there seemed to be a lot missing from the story. The part that strikes me as somewhat odd was that you cut the date out of the story. Surely this should be one of the most important parts of the game, but instead it's just a "your date went well" or something along those lines. By telling us more about that scene you could have fleshed out the story more - maybe the guy turns out to be perfect, maybe he's a psychopath. It would have allowed for a much deeper narrative.
-- tjwilliams555 on 3/1/2017 4:15:46 AM with a score of 0
Too short and no surprises. :( For first try - good!
-- Quorrah on 2/26/2017 10:57:05 PM with a score of 0
I thought you did great, I loved it and I think you should keep writing these.
-- Heather on 11/15/2016 1:11:24 PM with a score of 0
-- magic land on 7/19/2016 11:20:43 AM with a score of 0
Short, but pretty good. It needs a bit of improvement, like maybe a longer middle. I liked the story though.
-- Girly_Writer246 on 5/1/2016 9:13:43 PM with a score of 0
It needs to be longer. Other than that, it is good.
-- Shadowgirl_101 on 4/18/2016 3:07:05 PM with a score of 0
This story seemed a bit short
-- Maddyfan678 on 2/15/2016 2:19:54 AM with a score of 0
Too short...
-- Snowdust on 12/25/2015 2:24:48 AM with a score of 0
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