A World War

Player Rating3.02/8

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based on 121 ratings since
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Story Difficulty3/8

"trek through the forest"

Play Length4/8

"A well spent lunch break"

Maturity Level5/8

"aren't you a little too old to be trick or treating"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG-13.



 A World War 2 adventure.

You are John Keller, the year is 1941. Today will change a lot for you. Can you handle the forever changing world and it's effects? This will be edited often to correct it, I'd like input from you guys to tell me what you'd like to see. So enjoy! (Remember this is going to be edited a lot, so when ever it's published it's for people to test it out and give feedback, this will be finished when ever it's finished). 

Update 1: It's been a few good months. Sorry, my interest in writing has dwindled, but I felt I could write a few more pages so here you go, enjoy.


Player Comments

I like the start of this story but the problem is it sounds a bit... anecdotal. Writing Historical Fiction is tricky because to be done well these shocking historical events have to form the backdrop for the reader's character to deal with his own social, personal, religious issues and for the other things to happen to him. History can be part of the plot but there must be other things motivating the main character (patriotism is ok but it's not the most exciting of all possible motives).

To give an example take the film Titanic. The ship sinks and lots of people die but that's not the main story, the main story is Jack and Rose and Billy Zane trying to kill them, the Titanic is their world but the drama is first their love and then their trying to survive. Or take the Sharpe series, that's well historically researched but the main character Sharpe always has a particular plot in each book (usually hunt down an enemy or sometimes carry out a special mission that brings him into contact with dangerous foes, unexpected allies, beautiful women etc). To breathe life into your story think what your main character can be doing in his career (maybe he finds out he has a brother who has gone missing in action on such and such island?)

It's a little rich of me to give this advice btw cause my historical stories are basically simulations of actual events but I guess they only really appeal to people already interested in that history while historical fiction appeals to anyone interested in thrillers, romances, mysteries etc... I really need to widen my writing range at some point.

Anyway, this is a good start and it'll be interesting to see where you go with this.
-- Will11 on 9/20/2015 10:09:41 PM with a score of 0
It's kinda confusing once it gets to the bar scene... so the game is supposed to end no matter what I drink or drink or not??
-- TestingJest on 9/21/2017 11:03:55 PM with a score of 0
absolutely terrible
-- cbb on 7/24/2017 2:11:48 PM with a score of 0
It was honestly quite delightful I believe though for the marine side of the story that you please put in more for it like how he got in and how he did training
-- Cooliojojo on 6/28/2017 12:58:31 PM with a score of 0
It had some historical inaccuracies. It was a good start to a potential story, but I felt that it wasn't much of a war story. No action, no mentions of the war other than the mention of "japs" and one scene that ended the story. It's a good start, but the title is misleading. More research is needed.
-- Alex on 6/24/2017 10:56:25 AM with a score of 0
Doesn't go anywhere

At all.
-- Frank Gee on 6/24/2017 12:46:42 AM with a score of 0
There's just not much to it. It's not very well written, honestly, and I doubt you did much research on the time period.
-- drcynic on 12/20/2016 8:00:26 PM with a score of 0
-- Jade_Jester on 9/28/2016 7:08:42 PM with a score of 0
Alright, I want to say this now, about not publishing demos, I had this un-published for a long time, so I could just work on it, and there were a few people who didn't like the fact I did that, which is why I re-published it, so people could freely go back to it.
-- RuthdorFirehammer on 6/28/2016 8:20:26 AM with a score of 0
Why i dont understand
-- History on 6/16/2016 9:10:19 AM with a score of 0
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