Ducky Park

Structurally speaking, "Ducky Park" could be held up as a model storygame: A main character is efficiently outlined and a problem is posed on the first couple pages; meaningful and interesting choices are presented, with some commentary on why the main character finds each option appealing (or not appealing, as the case may be); different scenarios are revealed as a result of those choices; character traits are revealed through interesting dialog; and each story path is laid out through to its own logical conclusion.

I can't say that I found the story as absurdly humorous as I hoped it would be, but I went into to "Ducky Park" knowing there was no right outcome, therefore it was fun to make all the wrong choices and see what happens. Of the branches I've read so far, drinking beer dressed as Dastardly Dog may have been the most fun. I've saved this story so that I can come back and read more of the branches when I'm in the mood for some light reading.

On the other hand, I wished there was an "edit punctuation, spelling, and capitalization" feature that allowed me to satisfy my perfectionist tendencies. The author possessed several misconceptions about the English language that were repeated over and over and over and over again, making it obvious he thought this was really the way it was supposed to work--perhaps a trait that could traced back to some failure of a public school teacher.

And one final note: despite the admirably amount of branching (each branch about equal in length) too many of the stories ended the same way: security firing you from your job (can a security guard do that?), and your father lashing you with his belt for being an idiot. This repetitiveness was a letdown.

Duck Park provided me with an hour of laughs over my lunch break. So thank you for that. The way it is set up, there are not an abundance of choices, but each leads you to a different path entirely. The story is broad rather than deep. The plot is simple. Despite the shortness of the branches, there managed to be several memorable characters--my favorite of which being the redneck overseer of the rides.
Ducky Park is no great epic, but it ranks among the best pure comedies I have had the pleasure of reading on this fine site.

One of the two stories DEP copied over from Infinite Story and while Reunion got featured, I feel that Ducky Park is a better story overall and underrated.

The plot is simple. It tells the tale of a hapless retard getting a job in an amusement park. Hilarity ensues.

Well hilarity ensued for me at least. You’re either going to like the humor in the story or you won’t. Since the story’s main draw is humor, its success is dependent on it and since humor varies from person to person, that might be why it has a middle of the road rating overall.

It isn’t a long story, but it does have a good amount amount of branching all of which lead to amusing ways the protagonist can fail spectacularly. The writing of course is good as is to be expected from DEP.

I know DEP said he was supposed to expand the story at some point. Some of the added stuff would have included a few extra choices like some more mascot costumes to wear, a Halloween focused branch and a branch dealing with the little kid section of the park. Who knows, maybe one day we’ll see these additions.

Anyway, I liked it a lot.

I laughed until I choked, very funny and very creative! How the hell do you come up with this stuff?

The idea of this retarded dude working at an amusement park and getting intro trouble is really creative, and all of the endings made me laugh like crazy. My favorites were probably the "Dastardly Dog" ones, although I also loved the one where he hallucinates a girlfriend. Poor guy can't catch a break!

I read through the cringiest sex scene and the worst pick up lines. This felt like a clear author insert.

Seeing Ricky die multiple times due to his retardedity has really boosted my ego, thank you

No win....WTF

That was hilarious, but your name is crude. Btw I wish it was longer because it was pretty good. 7/8

Pretty decent in my opinion.

Definitely a very humorous game, and I laughed multiple times while reading the very funny and creative writing. Although, at some points the sense of humor seemed to get old. Perhaps it went a bit over the top, and just seemed like really lolrandom humor.

The writing is definitely pretty good, and the characters seemed well developed (at least most of them anyways.) But the sense of humor just seemed repetitive to me, and overall that made for a downfall in the writing quality.

While the humor didn't appeal to me as much as was probably intended the choices are meaningful to the storygame, and there's a fair amount of branching here, so well done on that note.

You did do a very good job of fleshing out a plot and setting, and the characters were mostly well developed, as i've said. The details provided about the characters and their personalities definitely gave them a realistic feeling and relatable characteristics, which is always nice to see in a storygame.

4/8, lots of room for improvement but this was pretty good.

Well, I would like a bit more choice, even if the choices were a bit wacky and random. I'd enjoy that, but suddenly I get the impulse to touch a girl while working a lemonade stand??? It seems more chance than anything.