Escape School 2- Watergrove Academy

Not bad at all.

I must say that this was an improvement over the first game, as far as story presentation and overall flow go. This game actually captured my attention and held it for the duration of my multiple playthroughs, so hats off for creating something that was rather engaging and interesting to read.

Ah, but there was some rather problematic issues with the grammar of this storygame. The capitalization of sentences were inconsistent, and I can't stress enough the importance of tidying such things up so they're not able to be detrimental to the story that you're trying to tell your readers. Still, you do have potential when it comes to making fascinating narratives.

I enjoyed that this didn't feel quite linear, as there were multiple endings to earn that varied from favorable to not so favorable for the protagonist. Such things made me want to explore every possible ending that I could be gained out of curiosity. So not bad on that front, because I do feel that shows some imagination and effort from the writer.

All in all, you show promise as a writer, but I really do recommend that you learn to take your time with such things as grammar and making sure that your story has as little flaws as possible. At least when it comes to the technical side of things that is.

Overall, I think that this was some fine work.

There's some serious potential here! The plot is definitely better than your last game, and the pathes are nice and non-linear. However, your storytelling (including spelling and grammar) could use some serious work. My advice would be to spend a little bit more time working on those aspects. I can tell, due to the extremely short timespan between each one being made, that you must be rushing to churn these games out. Perhaps you could have someone read your next one(s) over and help correct mistakes?

Again, a pretty good game, but there's still a rather large amount of room for improvement.

Why can’t I get the perfect ending?!? I did it like 3 million times!!!

Easy and fun. nice job.

It's slightly better than the first game, and now there are less people trying to kill me, but it really needs a bit more than this.

it is unbelivebley short I love it but it needs to be a little bit longer

Well,that's it...

Cool story

Grammatical errors make it hard to read. Basically good storyline. A little too silly in naming some things.

Not bad. It was interesting and the over-all grammar was ok.