Friend Zone

Player Rating3.21/8

"#831 overall, #101 for 2014"
based on 471 ratings since 07/23/2014
played 12,497 times (finished 825)

Story Difficulty3/8

"trek through the forest"

Play Length2/8

"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"

Maturity Level3/8

"must be at least this tall to play"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 10. If this were a movie, it would probably be between G and PG.

You play as April, a girl who has been friend zoned by her best guy friend, Daniel. Your goal is to escape the friend zone. There are a good amount of ways this can play out. 

This is my first storygame. 

Player Comments

I am actually very critical of romance stories, to be honest. It's only a rare occasion where I don't find them a little too cheesy, unrealistic, clumsy, boring, so on. (Or, hey, they can also be just poorly disguised smut / porn in some cases.) I didn't hate or even particularly dislike this, but I can't say I really ... liked it.

I have actually enjoyed homework more than I did this story, but I'm a nerd, so maybe that doesn't really count. For a first story, it's really not... -bad-, you've got some errors here and there, but nothing hideous or glaring, so you're doing better than a lot of new writers.

However, the story is short. None of the paths give a reader adequate time to develop a bond with any of the characters, so I can't say I care about them. I think the crush in this story is kind of an ass and the best friend is, too, but eh. That's as far as my opinion of the characters goes. I know nothing about Oliver and the extent I know of April is that she's sad and she has had an exceptionally long crush on a guy, expecting him to know without being told. That's it.

There's nothing wrong with a short story, mind you, but it has to 1: be the kind of story that -can- be told in few page, and 2: still convey an interesting, full story in the short space it's given. Love stories don't tend to fit both requirements very well.

Also, as far as romances go, this isn't a particularly interesting story. Oh, sure, it's one that most of us can relate to and that's a good idea for a premise--but that also means you have a lot of pressure on you to capture that emotion, those circumstances, and that heart-ache realistically.

At first, I thought you might manage. I mean, I can see a girl spending a few hours in bed, tissues everywhere, depressed, stiff all over from curling up and crying over the loss of her crush to her bestie. It's not hard to imagine in real life. Unfortunately, later on, the story feels pretty awkward and unrealistic in some places.

All of that said, I will commend you on the fact that it's not very linear for a short story. You can have more than three endings and for a first story, that's pretty good. They're also varied in tone, since a couple are happy, some are bitter sweet, and a couple are just downers. Keep at it, okay? I think you'll get better. I'd advise putting more time into the next one.
-- Kiel_Farren on 7/24/2014 2:36:52 AM with a score of 0
Very short story with basically one ending.
-- deathblade172 on 9/17/2018 2:51:43 PM with a score of 0
pretty short would like it if it was longer
-- person on 9/4/2018 9:49:39 PM with a score of 0
it was ok
-- PrincessStarlight on 5/3/2018 10:00:39 AM with a score of 0
not good
-- Amanda Moore on 4/26/2018 2:04:58 PM with a score of 0
its pretty good and i like the story alot
-- thepinkgirl19 on 4/17/2018 6:42:16 AM with a score of 0
It was ok
-- Dragoneel on 4/4/2018 12:36:04 PM with a score of 0
I love love story’s but to chessey
-- Theendman on 4/1/2018 8:36:34 PM with a score of 0
And the moral of the story is: your crush is a piece of shit.

Enjoyable story, by the way.
-- Saika on 8/3/2017 9:21:54 AM with a score of 0
I like how you are a girl that has had her heartbroken by her best friend and her crush. I picked The barista in the end, because who really wants to see their crush after they broke your heart with your best friend? NO ONE DOES!!!!! Have fun wit the game!! :)
-- Lilly Van Dam on 6/30/2017 12:01:43 PM with a score of 0
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