School Life in America

While I realize this story has a very narrow and defined purpose, I think it could have used a little more detail and description. Starting out: what age students are we dealing with here? Obviously, this would be radically different in America if the kids were in elementary school as opposed to high school. I guess with such a narrow audience it doesn’t matter, but for general readers on the site, it would be more useful.

I find it interesting your view of American families, people, and school based on this story. For example, the fight with your sister. Not everyone fights with their sisters over breakfast. And also the car – apparently this is high school students. But I would say that any student, just about anywhere in America, who has a car in high school is going to drive that car to school. There’s just no way anyone will ride a bus when they have a car. In fact, that goes on beyond school, too, but still.

The scenes in the school were kind of funny. I liked the teacher yelling at me when I tried to skip math class. The lunch options and the student groups were kind of hilarious, too. But dodge ball? Don’t you know how dangerous that is today? I think a teacher would go to jail today if they tried to get students to play dodge ball – it’s that serious of an issue in America. After all, someone could get their feeling hurt!

I did like the elective at the end of the day. And the after school activities were kind of fun, too. So I’m not sure how realistic this was supposed to be, but at least it was complete and well written. The choices didn’t really seem to have an effect on the story, but I guess the point was just to show that people have choices. Overall not too bad, but not great, either.

One word. BORING

The giant text was wierd. Also, I WANT TO BE EEEEMMMMMMOOOOO

it was okay

Fairly good.

Lol great ecept what about the part where you get kicked out of school for beating up some random kid

Noice

Sorry! I really am, it's just theres not enough choices or adventure or detail.

Okay. So, it was fine to serve it's purpose...in a way.It was very simple and was done within a couple of minutes. I think more detail could of been added and more events that actually happen in a school day, not just your lessons and journey to school. The grammar was fine but there was not much writing to actually perfect. Also, I suggest when making a game keep the font the normal size as this large font was kind of off putting.

Not realistic. At all. Kinda sad. No offense.