Player Comments on The Land of Bad Writing

5/8
Nice concept that is well executed. All I had a problem with was that the player could leave the world from the start. You should have made it that the player had to explore some areas first before waking up.

I got a chuckle outta it.

We have a list here of 20 common pitfalls. Sufficiently criticized and organized. That's it, that's the whole thing. The criticism is neither instructional nor especially insightful. That's my hang up with this, I wouldn't direct anyone here to learn anything. I’ll explain why I feel this way by example.

So in “Extremist Views” I expected clever parody, but instead it’s a slog of spelling and grammar mistakes. Types of errors need to be in isolation. I’d also argue that bad ideology isn’t the same thing as bad mechanical writing. The problem with ideological writing is that a writer might be prone to incredible leaps in logic. They build up the hero to carry their ideology then set up numerous strawmen for their hero to knock down with the greatest of ease.

“Love Fantasies” is similar. The grammar and spelling isn’t what I’m looking to have a laugh at here. Still this one was pretty funny, though I would have liked to have seen it even more overwritten. I really wanted to feel the desperation, you know?

I think the purpose of “I will guide you” might be to demonstrate when an author doesn’t “show” and simply “tells,” while also criticizing authors who self-aggrandize and won’t hear criticism, but maybe it’s just the second. I don’t know. This is weird. I also don’t know if it's the narrator or the bad writer I’m listening to here. No less, none of these examples instruct the reader. They merely demonstrate bad writing.

“Just don’t do like this” is not itself good advice.

Hahaha! Great idea, and well executed. I think "Plagiarism" was my favorite. I did notice that in some of the links, apostrophes and/or accented characters were garbled, like so: weren’t

But that's a very minor quibble. Thanks for this handy guide to bad writing!

Hahaha!

This is great. This is a bit old so you might not even care about this review, but I don't know why the ratings aren't higher! The only real problem is the punctuation. You can't end a sentence like "example" you need to end it with a comma, period, or... - I don't know the name of it exactly.

Good points, but I wish you would have added some real capitalization.

(Sorry if I've left a review before, I have bad memory)

I cannot say this enough. THANK YOU for showing people how to actually write well. I despise poor grammar, and if a story has really terrible grammar, I will not even bother to read it (I'm sorry if this sounds snotty or hypocritical).

Anyway, this was a very good way to teach people what good and bad writing is. I give it a 6/8, because nothing is better than Reese's cups.

This is a good way to teach how to write well. It's accurate and well written, and I like the format it's presented in. Nice job. 6/8

The author has managed to include most every form of bad writing possible, and deserves commendation. I cannot imagine how much pain one would go through to write so badly.
It would have been better if there were more types of endings, or a story with all the types of bad writing.
Overall, very fun!

Wow, you even included Mary Sues here!

It does er- a good bad job of showcasing common traits of bad writing. I guess the irony is it highlights faults by merely existing.

Coming from a readers point of view. I believe it could have done a better job of defining bad writing traits. At times I couldn't fully understand the problem it tried to address which leaves room for misinterpretation.

To simply force home the agony of reading a story with horrible grammar and slightly incoherent lessons it does a good job. I certainly feel like I was in The Land of Bad Writing.

I've lost it at the "Disrespect your Elders" part! x'D
Pure crack with a valuable lesson.

Don't expect a standard storyline. Interesting and funny take. :). Wait - does the author not like smiley faces?

Funny truth. Sadly the short stories are all to true.

CRINGE!
That's the last time I take grammar for granted. Only a truly horrendous writer could read this without pain. This is mad, but it's great.
(Also, 3/8 for a game with SEXUAL INTERCOURSE in it? Seems legit.)

Well constructed sentences making fun of other writers in an attempt to educate! I'm not sure what to say. You accomplish your goal but it wasn't my cup of tea. Maybe if some of the examples of bad writing were longer you'd be able to get the point across better. Most were a good length but there were a few that was like... "what's he trying to say here?" oh well, all in all you do show of your grasp of the English language well.

10/10 would not understand anything again

Uh, what is this? it seems like just examples of bad writing, kinda funny I guesss.

Why bother?

Meh

Hmm.....I don't know what to say Will. Either you've done it again or this is.....just weird now.

I loved the grammar as usual, but.....just......the plot.........

6/8

interesting concept---hilarious examples!

This made me very happy.

Rather funny!

Honestly, it was fantastic. All new writers should delve into this terrifying land.

Thank you for being so insulting to bad writers(I'm serious!).

It was good.

There was too much reading though.

My favourite part was when you suddenly fall asleep and enter this world called the land of bad writing where you get to go through doors listed as different things like: Authors Fantasies, bad writing, characters, plot, and special features. And then in each of those doors there were four more doors on different subjects according to which door you chose. Oh yeah and WARNING SPOILER ABOVE.

This didn't have any warrior cats in it! ?? 1/8.

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Suddenly you wake up from the land of bad comments and discover a comment from a person who had a lot of fun reading this story, and thinks that it is a great guide to new writers and has even learnt a thing or two himself about character. Therefore rating the game 6/8.

what did i play?

Unfortunately, this is pretty accurate. :)

Gotta say: This was certainly an amusing way to educate fellow writers on how *not* to write. Seems like you had fun with this one. Good effort!

cool

This was quite entertaining. It's great someone did something like this so good job Wil11, I think everyone can learn a little something from this :)

Genuinely made me LOL. ^_^

This made me so very very happy. It's message soared gracefully over the green fields of my mind exactly like a bowling ball wouldn't.

This is the worst storygame ever. 10/10 Top LeL. Random French why?

I love how you showed the horrible writing examples. I enjoyed laughing at them. I've seen some stories that are like that. It was very educational for me, and I am being sincere.

Fantastic

Fantastic. I absolutely loved it.

Haha thanks Anonymous for pointing out the problem with the apostrophes, that was a genuine mistake because for some reason whenever I use an apostrophe in the title or as a link it appears as random squiggly stuff. I won't un-publish it to correct it because it adds to the deliberate badness of the writing but I'll bear it in mind in my other story games, thank you everyone else for the mostly positive feedback :)

Anonymous, I think that Will did that on purpose to make a joke.

• This room’s writing is so terrible you immediately flee back to the Author’s Fantasies.

This is the link that appeared on the "Extremist Views" page. The apostrophes do not appear to have...rendered...correctly. it may interest you to unpublish the game and look into that. You may need to replace the apostrophes with &#39 .

Very entertaining and hilarious. I really like the door labeled BAD WRITING. 8/8 keep writing

Great story Will! While some might not understand it because of their lack of intelligence or they're just giving a troll rating. Honestly, we could all learn something from this story. 6/8

The furfucks could learn a thing or two from this story. :)

Don't worry it's just effectively a guide on 20 things to avoid if you want to write a good story game by exaggerating each example such as bad grammar or writing unoriginal stories :)

I did not even understand a little of it.
1/8