Zombie Mayhem

This game does have potential, but it lacks a strong story. The combat system was pretty cool as it was somewhat similar to that of an RPG game. I feel that aspect is this game's strongest point, but it could use some improvements in other areas, mainly both the grammar and actual storytelling.

Proofreading would have went a long way in improving some aspects of the writing, because I found myself running into some issues with the grammar of this story. Also I'm aware that attempts to build suspense in certain scenes were made, but I think that those attempts were done poorly. Some pages could have used more words in general, and more of an attempt to show some emotion in the writing would've made this seem more inspired.

This game has a good system in place here, the combat system works out well and is fun for the most part. But it seems like things like story aspects take a backseat in the overall presentation of this storygame. I would recommend working harder to make all elements of your work to be equally as strong when compared to each other.

You show promise as a writer, but I would to see some effort. There's always room for growth and improvement after all.

It was ok. Kinda sucks no matter what it ends when you go back to check on your family regardless of if you do it immediately or after going through everything. You don't get the option of checking your family and then doing everything.

was great until the fucking "tbc" you tacked onto the end

Good

Not bad!

Enjoyed the combat mechanics in this game, but wish there was a bit more story, or more to explore before going back home.

Overall, good gameplay but short.

It's a good game

It was good and still was short but I will go see part 2

Nice gameplay you get weapons from the start and killing zombies is fun so give this game a try because you will probably like it.
So i rate it 10/10 For just how fun it is and the story is great so you will probably like it so enjoy it if y

Sick story.

Hey, continue! You've left me in suspense! Great except for a few spelling and one grammar issue. Fun!