Zombies ARE Racist

Ha! This game is hilarious, it's unfortunate that it's incomplete, I actually had a pretty good laugh reading through this (the scene with the zombie and the wrench had me cracking up like a goddamn fool).

As a parody of the zombie genre and a humorous little story, this is perfect, and I sincerely hope that was your intention while making this.

Otherwise... well, I think you should probably brush up on your storytelling. As a serious story, this would fall short on rather many levels (For one, the scene that had me cracking up - the zombie violating himself, then you, and then you violating him, all with a wrench, is - while hilarious - hardly something you should include if you want a story to be in any way realistic, touching or even mildly respectable).

You also seem to be following the traditional zombie path (You wake up, zombies happened, then you find a military camp). Don't, I cannot emphasize enough how much this has been done to death, it's the exact same story for every zombie telling and it gets old quick. I know it may be difficult to think of some more original progression, but that's the challenge to any overworked genre, and those rare works that take the less-travelled path will often get rewarded for it; if their author is good enough that is.

Your pages are too short, and you have a few loops. Fix those, haha; try and give the reader a sense of what's happening around him, don't let them just think of everything as a sequence of actions, you have to try and make them feel like there is some real progression here, not like they're just some guy screwing around in an apocalyptic world.

All of that being said, I personally much prefer this game as a parody, you've done an excellent job of making me laugh and I value that more than the traditional zombie story.

As a storygame? This will get a 3/8 from me, i'm sorry to say; even if I enjoyed it, it is incomplete, short and has loops. Fix those and it'll definitely bring my rating up,

Gr8 story m8 I r8 it 8/8

Seriously though, my sides hurt from laughing too hard.

Jolly good show old bean.

It was rather funny but also limited in descriptions. It is a shame it isn't finished.

The only thing about this game that makes me want to rate it above a 1 is Briar's comment. xD As that has very little to do with you so much as it is just Briar being Briar, a 1 is all you get.

my...my ''friend'' carl shoots me?.

Well duh! Of course zombies are racist. So are aliens, werewolves, ghosts, vampires and crazy serial killers. Is why the black guy always dies first in horror movies.

You know, you could've at least finished writing the game, then that would be one less thing people would trash this game for.

Thugs + zombies is an interesting combination which is fun to see explored, I hope you can finish it. Maybe let us collect bling for going the right routes.

Someone calling this stereotyping might as well complain that "The Wire" or "Aftermath records" is full of racial stereotypes. Yes some people with dark skin tones have a particular culture which can be interesting to explore, and no to explore it does not mean that everyone with dark skin is part of that culture.

Just, I don't even get it. Too much effort went in for this to be trolling, yet... I can't help but wonder...

This was terrible and filled with racial stereotypes. I was cringing throughout this entire game. Please, don't finish this. Ever.