Player Comments on The Invasion of CYOA

Okay, so based on the teaser page, this is a joke story. Fair enough. Nice first page, I like that I have choices. I am a little confused that I have choices since the homepage is gone, but…it was a quick split there with the choices leading me back to The Post. That’s fine, I’m not expecting a developed story here, so it’s nice to see the choices give me options. I do like that when I get to the search section there are actually options there, as well. There’s no clue which is the right option, but at least there’s options.

Of course, that feeling of joy quickly disappears when I find out that it’s actually a click-fest and I have to choose the correct option to continue. The next choice was even less of a choice. And wait, how did EndMonster create the die alien storygame before we even started? I’m not sure why the link item was added. Since it could only be used that one place, I think it might have worked better as an actual link instead of an item.

Then the ending was, well, a little weak. I mean the idea here was nice, but clearly this was very little more than a joke storygame. It could have been more detailed, had more action, and had more choices that led to different outcomes and different paths to get to those outcomes. It was a nice attempt at a parody, but really just wasn’t all that developed to be effective for me.

The choices of names could've certainly be better. :/ "Smeto" doesn't make much sense, though we know who it is. EndMonster and ThanaPeaches are better because they somehow relate to the original outside of name parodies.

There were a few grammar errors, but what really got to me was the tense changing. You 'said' things in past tense, then suddenly, he 'says' something in present tense.

The storygame wasn't very funny either. At least for me. Perhaps I'm just not excited by the random type of humor involved in the storygame, but in general, I felt that it was really thin. What they said was equivalent to somebody that keeps swearing thrice per sentence (well, not that annoying); there's no real meaning to it. It doesn't even attempt to help someone understand the site better.

While I'm simply not a fan of storygames like this, your writing is pretty good. :D Just need better names and a purpose, and it could be really good!

This was an attempt at a random humour game using obvious versions of well known members to attempt at the inside joke feel of other games in here.

Sadly despite using people's names, there was never really enough text to parody them properly and most of the names could be interchanged easily so it didn't really work in that aspect.

The game was also extreamly short and linear, when the choices didn't lead to instant loss they were just sending you back to the other choice anyway so it was a single path game. If you want to make a joke game using members names you have to remember that members change, many of the active members right now are new and will be replaced by other in a year or two so the humour has to not only parody them but also be funny for someone who doesn't recognise the names.

Nice story, although - EndMonster seems like the kind of person who would grumble about aliens at least having more intelligence than a lot of the people we have been receiving on the forums recently.
Oh, you also forgot Misalt! Entertaining read.

NIOCE

can you make a sequal

get rid of cysid now before he can rebel!!!!!!!!!!

3/8 It didn't have enough humor

Clever plot. It might be better if there were more choices, but it's pretty good as is.

The idea was nice, but I feel like i could have been executed in a somewhat less random, linear manner. As for it being a parody, it feels more like a generic random story with CYS names tagged on than a parody of the site and its members.

I thought this was pretty awesome and enjoyable. All the names made me laugh, especially Smeto. It was short, sure, but I liked the humour and the style of writing. Felt like I was literally browsing CYS at one point, and that's an experience in itself. It might benefit from some further development, but the puns were amusing and I enjoyed it.

Pretty boring despite all the cameos. Needs to be longer paragraph and page wise. Please note that there is no rush to create storygames as this one has a lot of potential to be a featured one. I recommend unpublishing it, really think about what kind of random derailments that have occured in the past. Trust me, there are plenty.

4/8

It's a great idea- but I feel that it came off a bit boring. This has a lot of room for improvement.

It was quite good and very unique.
However, I feel that it could have been longer. The story was a bit too short.

Overall good. 5/8

Fun. Didn't get most of the inside jokes though.

Yeh.....

Pretty average, in my taste. Decent details, you could have gotten the other users more involved, I liked EndMonster's story, I pity smalexg.

Overall nothing wrong, but nothing really stands out. 5/8.

I liked the game, but I consider it was a bit too short, and could have benefited from parodying more aspects of CYS (Mizal's noob crushing, Warrior Cats, pro nazi trolls, etc).
Only the final choices were meaningful to the story's development and while there was some humour, a lot more could have been done by having the player interact with the characters instead of just using names as references, and by having choices impact the final result, as to who survives and who doesn't.
Overall, fun game, but fell short on its possibilities.

Pros:
-Semi-decent short story
-Almost moderately funny

Cons:
-No Tim

5/8.

I liked it, it was creative and different. Also a good length.

This game..... is too weird. It's quite short but overall writing seems fine. This story is quite good considering the fact that your computer was extremely laggy. It's too linear though and the only real choices were the 3 choices at the end of this extremely short story.

Fun story

Lol, this was awesome XD

Haha, this game implies AlexP actually cares about this site.

Cute, but it's really short, and the only actual choice is right at the end. And it's an 'immediately win or lose the game' kind of choice, at that.

And forget what Malk said about Thrilla_Robot...what the heck is alexp doing around at all, let alone hanging out with scrubs on the Lounge?

Also I...I don't think you can take over the coding of the site from a storygame. Not even on THIS site.

Well, there was no branching and it was insanely short, which sucked. Despite you changing names you didn't seem to actually parody anyone, which would've been funny, but instead they were just kind of their as placeholders. The plot was ridiculous but not in a fun way like "Cows vs Aliens" or something. Also, you can't unban, which was a pretty essential plot point. All in all, pretty weak.

I feel like Thrilla_Robot wouldn't be active enough to ward off an alien invasion.

Kinda linear, but funny :D

Very fun story even if it is a bit short.

I thought this was a brief, good story game... although short.

XD hooray! Smeto didn't die lol.

Love the spin-off names, especially Endmonster. :p Funny, albeit a bit short, but I'm not going to take this as a super serious CYS. A nice five minute break.

Well, this was certainly interesting. ^_^